IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3168 – Band 6.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show information about consumer decisions regarding mobile phone purchases in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

IELTS Juice Writing Task 1 report sample 3168 – Band 6.5

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Candidate’s Response:

The figures represent the percentages of four factors that affect consumer’s decision-making process related to paying a new mobile phone in two countries. These factors are Price, Brand, Design, and friends’ recommendations.

Apparently, Half of the sample confirms that Price plays the most significant role in consumer’s purchasing decisions in country A. Whereas only 10% of people concern about Design as a reference to depend on. In addition, the least factor was the Brand that only 7% of phone market consumers looking for.

In contrast, Country B’s sample shows less sensitivity to the phone’s price with only 9% of people were interested in it. Otherwise, 40 % of people said they are affected by Design itself over other factors such as Brand which were recommended by 19% of people.

However, a third of the sample in each countries concern in their Friends’ recommendations and advice when they decide to buy a new cellular phone.

153 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

April 27, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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Disclaimer

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Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The question does not mention any time references; in such cases, present simple tense is the best choice for verb tenses throughout the report. Overall, this piece is approaching a band 6.5 but to push towards a band 7 or higher, greater accuracy in grammar and vocabulary use is needed, as well as a clearer structure that facilitates the comparison between the two countries' consumer behaviors.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

7.0 could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The question does not mention any time references; in such cases, present simple tense is the best choice for verb tenses throughout the report. Overall, this piece is approaching a band 6.5 but to push towards a band 7 or higher, greater accuracy in grammar and vocabulary use is needed, as well as a clearer structure that facilitates the comparison between the two countries' consumer behaviors.

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The charts compare the factors influencing mobile phone purchases in two different countries, identified as Country A and Country B.

In Country A, price appears to be the most significant factor, accounting for half of the consumers' decision-making process. Friends' recommendations also play a substantial role, constituting a third of the considerations. Design and brand name, on the other hand, are less influential, with only 10% and 7% of consumers considering them respectively.

Contrastingly, in Country B, design is the paramount factor, with 40% of consumers influenced by this aspect. Brand reputation is also a major consideration, influencing 19% of the decisions. Friends' recommendations are nearly as influential as in Country A, at 32%. Price, however, is much less of a concern in Country B, affecting only 9% of the choices.

The data indicates that while personal recommendations have a similar impact on mobile phone purchases in both countries, the significance of price and design varies markedly. In Country A, affordability is the key, whereas in Country B, aesthetic and brand prestige hold more sway in the decision-making process. This suggests that consumers in Country A are more price-sensitive, while those in Country B place higher value on the product's appearance and brand identity.

208 words

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