IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3112 – Band 6.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The given charts give information about the number of students at university in the UK from 1991 to 2001, government spending and the types of family economic background they came from in 1991.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The information of the number of attendees at university in the UK in the period of 1991 to 2001 is compared in the given bar chart, and government expenditure on each student during this period is illustrated in the line chart. The pie chart shows the financial situation of students in 1991.

Overall, it is abundantly clear that during the survey, the number of students, participating university in the UK, surged, while government spending on every pupil saw a significant decrease. In 1991, a majority of students came from middle-class families.

Looking at the bar chart, it can be seen that in 1991, just over a million students were at the university in the UK. In the following four years, this number increased to over 1,500,000 students which remained stable until 1997, before experiencing a peak of just over 2,000,000 students in 1999. Finally, the number of students had slightly dipped to 2,000,000 by 2001.

Regarding the line chart, in 1991, the government expended about 6,500 pound for each student, but this amount of subsid was cutted until 1996 to just below 5000 pound. The expenditure had been remained unchanged by 2001.

If we look at the pie chart, it can be obvious that the main students’ families had middle incomes, with 62% of the whole numbers, and 30% of them came from wealthy families in 1991. Only a mere 8% of them were poor.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

January 4, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. Let's focus on two areas: Lexical Resource (LR): The candidate uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, with some attempt to use less common vocabulary, though with inaccuracy, such as "expended" instead of "spent" and "subsid" instead of "subsidy". There are some errors in spelling and word formation that do not impede communication, such as "cutted" instead of "cut".

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used, and some errors in grammar and punctuation are present but they rarely reduce communication. Errors like "had been remained unchanged" show a lack of control over complex structures.

Overall:
The overall response is competent, addressing the task with relevant data representation. To improve, the candidate should focus on enhancing the accuracy of language, both in terms of vocabulary and grammar, and strive for a clearer. The response should also aim for more precise and varied lexical use, avoiding inaccuracies in word choice and formation. Lastly, to achieve a higher band, the response must present a fully developed analysis of the charts, with all key features extended and supported.

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

7.0 could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. Let's focus on two areas: Lexical Resource (LR): The candidate uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, with some attempt to use less common vocabulary, though with inaccuracy, such as "expended" instead of "spent" and "subsid" instead of "subsidy". There are some errors in spelling and word formation that do not impede communication, such as "cutted" instead of "cut".

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used, and some errors in grammar and punctuation are present but they rarely reduce communication. Errors like "had been remained unchanged" show a lack of control over complex structures.

Overall:
The overall response is competent, addressing the task with relevant data representation. To improve, the candidate should focus on enhancing the accuracy of language, both in terms of vocabulary and grammar, and strive for a clearer. The response should also aim for more precise and varied lexical use, avoiding inaccuracies in word choice and formation. Lastly, to achieve a higher band, the response must present a fully developed analysis of the charts, with all key features extended and supported.

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The provided charts illustrate data on university attendance in the UK over a ten-year period, government expenditure per student, and the economic backgrounds of students in 1991.

From 1991 to 2001, there was a steady increase in the number of students attending universities in the UK. In 1991, just over 1,000,000 students were enrolled, and by 2001, this figure had risen to nearly 2,500,000, showing more than a twofold increase.

In terms of government spending per student, there was a significant decline. In 1991, each student received approximately £6,500 from the government, but by 2001, this amount had decreased to just above £5,000.

When examining the economic backgrounds of students in 1991, a large majority (62%) came from middle-income families, while 30% were from low-income families, and a small fraction (8%) came from high-income families.

Overall, while university attendance saw substantial growth from 1991 to 2001, government spending per student decreased. The majority of students in 1991 were from middle-income backgrounds, suggesting that higher education was most accessible to this demographic.

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