IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3128 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

With the rise of e-books come the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

An increasing popularity of e-books on the global market negatively affects a production rate of paper books. Some people consider that this trend is a positive movement towards future, while others feel that it would have a knock-off effect on people’s reading interest. In my opinion, the benefits of the electronic books offer to readers certainly outweigh the drawbacks.

There is little room for doubt that e-books obviously provide a number of advantages for people which influence readers to obtain them. One evident benefit of e-books is that they allow people to keep as many books as they need without having a necessity of having physical storages to keep them. In addition, today’s availability of mobile electronic devices, such as e-readers, smartphones, and tablets, brings possibility for people to enjoy pleasure of reading any book they want at any convenient time. Lastly, some editions of electronic books offer possibility for readers to make notes and define unknown words and phrases electronically. Thus, contemporary e-books have a huge number of valuable options which make them preferable among people from all over the world.

On the other hand, there are a number of disadvantages that this books bring to a reading community. Firstly, they would have a negative effect on people, especially young people, by discouraging them from reading which eventually cause people to lose reading ability. In other words, most e-books are not provided with pictures compared to their paper editions, which a fundamental prerequisite for attracting children to read. Secondly, some of the cutting-edge books are provided with audio texts which turn most people into listen to them rather than reading. This option would prevent people from reading and entice them to listen to only more interesting parts of an e-book. Hence, electronic versions of books followed by specific options could repel readers’ interest from reading.

In conclusion, while e-books by providing a significant number of convenient features for readers would certainly grow in popularity, their negative aspects affecting people’s reading skill and reducing interest in reading should be taken into consideration.

342 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

May 1, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Task Response (TR): The essay adequately addresses the advantages and disadvantages of the rise of e-books. However, the argument could be more balanced as it leans heavily towards the benefits.
The writer's opinion is clear, but the conclusion could better summarize both sides of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The essay is well-structured with clear paragraphing.
Transitions like "On the other hand" and "In conclusion" are used effectively. However, some ideas need clearer connections and transitions for smoother flow.
Some points seem underdeveloped, such as the argument about e-books discouraging reading.

Lexical Resource (LR): The vocabulary is generally appropriate and there is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary.
There are minor inaccuracies and awkward phrases, such as "knock-off effect" which might be better expressed as "negative impact."

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with some errors.
There are grammatical mistakes and awkward constructions that occasionally hinder understanding, like "This option would prevent people from reading and entice them to listen to only more interesting parts of an e-book."

Overall Feedback:
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt, with well-structured arguments and relevant examples. To achieve a higher band, the writer should work on balancing the discussion, refining grammatical structures, and ensuring clarity and accuracy in language use.


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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Task Response (TR): The essay adequately addresses the advantages and disadvantages of the rise of e-books. However, the argument could be more balanced as it leans heavily towards the benefits.
The writer's opinion is clear, but the conclusion could better summarize both sides of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The essay is well-structured with clear paragraphing.
Transitions like "On the other hand" and "In conclusion" are used effectively. However, some ideas need clearer connections and transitions for smoother flow.
Some points seem underdeveloped, such as the argument about e-books discouraging reading.

Lexical Resource (LR): The vocabulary is generally appropriate and there is an attempt to use a range of vocabulary.
There are minor inaccuracies and awkward phrases, such as "knock-off effect" which might be better expressed as "negative impact."

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The essay displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with some errors.
There are grammatical mistakes and awkward constructions that occasionally hinder understanding, like "This option would prevent people from reading and entice them to listen to only more interesting parts of an e-book."

Overall Feedback:
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt, with well-structured arguments and relevant examples. To achieve a higher band, the writer should work on balancing the discussion, refining grammatical structures, and ensuring clarity and accuracy in language use.

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The emergence of e-books has triggered a decline in the popularity of traditional paper books, evoking contrasting opinions regarding its consequences. This trend brings forth both advantages and disadvantages.
One of the primary advantages of e-books is their accessibility and convenience. E-books offer instantaneous access to a vast array of literature, allowing readers to carry an entire library in a single device. Additionally, they provide adjustable font sizes and multimedia features that cater to diverse reading preferences, benefiting individuals with visual impairments or specific learning needs.
Moreover, e-books contribute to environmental conservation by reducing paper consumption, which aligns with sustainable practices and helps in preserving natural resources. The digital format also enables cost-effectiveness by eliminating printing and distribution expenses, making books more affordable and accessible, particularly in regions with limited access to physical libraries.
However, the shift towards e-books presents drawbacks. One notable disadvantage is the potential loss of the sensory experience that traditional paper books offer. The tactile sensation of flipping through pages, the distinct scent of paper, and the aesthetic appeal of a physical bookshelf may be absent in the digital reading experience.
Furthermore, reliance on electronic devices for reading can lead to issues related to eye strain, screen addiction, and potential distractions from other digital content. Additionally, disparities in access to technology and digital literacy may exclude certain demographics from enjoying the benefits of e-books.
In conclusion, the rise of e-books brings advantages such as accessibility and environmental sustainability, but it also poses challenges concerning the sensory experience of traditional books and potential drawbacks related to technology reliance and access disparities. Balancing these aspects is crucial to harness the benefits while mitigating the limitations of this evolving trend in reading habits.
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