IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3140 – Band 7.0

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

It has been argued that a person’s occupation, heavily hinges on their gender since it places a vital role in their proficiency and capability, because of their biological differences between male and female. Although some believe that everyone is equal and there is no differences between men and women, I uphold the standpoint that some special professions are suitable for a specific gender.

There are numerous people who justify their opinion that any type of job can be done by both men and women. They believe that these classifications, stem from the poor acceptance of women in society in previous decades and still many label some specific job female-dominated because of their old beliefs which is not belongs in today’s modern world. They believe that each person can obtain the qualities for any occupation and be prepared for them. For example, being a babysitter or a pilot is no longer restricted to a specific sex type.

However, it is undeniable that a woman’s nature is different in some aspects with a men’s. A woman’s stamina and endurance are usually weaker than a man’s. This means that for some specific jobs that require high physical strength, generally, men can have a better function. Take miners as a clear example, these people should work in such risky circumstances and should have been ready for carrying heavy loads of materials, which is undoubtedly not a preferable job title for women. Additionally, there are some other jobs that can be done better by females. For instance, when people think of a Nurse, they do think of a woman. This derive from the fact that women are more sensitive than men by their human nature, they are more capable to help people in need in a good manner.

In conclusion, while still many believe that gender marking in any kind of job, title is a mistake, I strongly accept that for some special professions a person’s gender should be taken into account. 

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

January 5, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The essay effectively addresses the topic, demonstrating a clear and well-developed argument. While your task response is strong, the grammatical range and accuracy need attention, particularly in ensuring subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Enhancing grammatical precision will improve the overall clarity and effectiveness of your writing. The essay shows good potential, and with some refinement in grammar, you could achieve a higher band score. Check this lesson out:


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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The essay effectively addresses the topic, demonstrating a clear and well-developed argument. While your task response is strong, the grammatical range and accuracy need attention, particularly in ensuring subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Enhancing grammatical precision will improve the overall clarity and effectiveness of your writing. The essay shows good potential, and with some refinement in grammar, you could achieve a higher band score. Check this lesson out:

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The notion that men and women possess inherently different qualities, leading to specific job suitability based on gender, is a contentious topic. While some hold firm to this belief, asserting that certain jobs align better with the traits typically associated with men or women, I firmly disagree with this perspective.
Firstly, attributing job suitability solely based on gender-linked qualities overlooks the individual skills, abilities, and interests that transcend gender stereotypes. Professions often associated with physical strength or leadership roles have historically been deemed more suitable for men, while nurturing or caregiving roles are typically considered more fitting for women. However, such assumptions disregard the diverse talents and aptitudes possessed by individuals, irrespective of gender.
Moreover, perpetuating the idea of gender-specific job suitability reinforces societal biases and limits opportunities for individuals. It perpetuates stereotypes and inhibits inclusivity and diversity in the workforce. In reality, both men and women can excel in any field based on their skills, qualifications, and passion for the job rather than conforming to traditional gender roles.
The evolving landscape of work emphasizes the importance of skills, competencies, and qualifications over gender-based assumptions. Diversity in the workplace brings a blend of perspectives, ideas, and skills that drive innovation and progress. Employers increasingly prioritize meritocracy, valuing individual abilities rather than conforming to outdated gender-based norms.
In conclusion, the belief that certain jobs are exclusively suitable for men or women based on perceived gender-specific qualities is outdated and restrictive. Emphasizing individual capabilities and qualifications fosters a more inclusive and diverse workforce, leading to greater innovation and progress in today's evolving work environment.
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