Protected: IELTS Writing Task 1 Report sample 3428 – Band 5.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

Economy and Business, Science and Research, Task 1 report, Transportation, Writing samples

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

February 25, 2020

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

5.0 presents, but inadequately covers, key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

5.0 there may be a lack of overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

5.0 may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate

5.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

5.5

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. While the report identified key trends, the overview could be clearer, and some details are inaccurate or repetitive. The organization lacks smooth transitions, and vocabulary is somewhat limited, with frequent repetition of words like "starting" and "production". Additionally, grammar mistakes, awkward sentence structures, and spelling errors lower the clarity and fluency of the response. To improve to Band 6.5 or higher, focus on writing a concise and well-structured overview, using a wider range of academic vocabulary and linking words, and ensuring grammatical accuracy with correct verb tenses and sentence structures.

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The graph illustrates the production levels of three main fuels—petroleum, natural gas, and coal—in the UK between 1981 and 2000, measured in energy units.

Overall, petroleum remained the dominant energy source throughout the period, despite some fluctuations, while natural gas production increased steadily. In contrast, coal production declined significantly over time.

Between 1981 and 1984, petroleum output surged from 90 to 140 energy units, before experiencing a gradual decline to approximately 100 energy units by 1992. However, production recovered from 1992 onwards, reaching around 140 units again by 2000. Meanwhile, coal production initially stood at 80 energy units but dropped sharply to 40 units by 1984, followed by minor fluctuations before settling at around 39 units in 2000.

In contrast, natural gas production followed a consistent upward trend. From 1981 to 1990, it remained relatively stable at around 40 units, but from 1990 onward, production rose significantly, surpassing 80 units by 1996 and continuing to increase steadily toward 100 units by 2000.

In summary, while petroleum production fluctuated, natural gas saw substantial growth, and coal output declined consistently over the two decades.

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