IELTS Writing Task 1 Report sample 3424 – Band 6.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in four kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

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Candidate’s Response:

The line chart illustrates the amount of people participating in four different types of physical activitiy activity in a certain region from 1985 to 2005. According to the data, while the number of people playing badminton and basketball remained quite stable over the time, the amount of tennis and rugby players fluctuated consistently, with rugby as the most practiced sport in 1985.

Just above 50 people played badminton in 1985, but this number fell slightly under 50, to around 48, by 1990. However, it moved back to about 50 players in 1995, and from that point on, the number was steady until 2005. Similarly, despite the amount of players being higher overall, basketball followed a very similar trend: starting from almost 100 people playing at the beginning of the period, they subtly decreased to around 75 in 1990. As well as for badminton, from that point on the number of people rose to less than 100 by 1995, remaining the same in 2000, but then it experienced a minor fluctuation to around 75 by the end of the period.

Tennis experienced a progressive increase over the period, starting from 150 players at the beginning, it rose to around 170 in 1990 and it reached 200 players in 1995. Then, it continued to grow to just above 200 in 2000, before peaking to around 230 by 2005. Although rugby had the higher highest number of players in 1985, almost 250, among the four sports considered, it experienced a downward trend overall. It decreased to almost 200 by 1990, before moving back to 200 in 1995, the same number as tennis. henceforth, it fell down to 150 in 2000, before a sharp decline to 50 by 2005.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

November 22, 2020

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)
8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features
6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate
6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected
6.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. The structure is logical, with an overview followed by a detailed description of each sport. However, the organization could improve by grouping similar trends (e.g., stable vs fluctuating sports). Linking phrases are present but sometimes repetitive ("from that point on," "before moving back"). Additionally, the connections between paragraphs and ideas could be smoother.

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The line chart illustrates the number of people participating in four different sports (badminton, basketball, rugby, and tennis) in a particular region over a 20-year period from 1985 to 2005. Overall, while tennis gained popularity, rugby experienced a significant decline. Meanwhile, badminton and basketball participation remained relatively stable, with minor fluctuations.
At the beginning of the period, rugby was the most popular sport, with nearly 250 participants in 1985. However, its popularity dropped sharply over time, declining to around 200 by 1990 and matching tennis participation at 200 in 1995. Following this, rugby’s numbers plummeted further to just 50 by 2005, marking the largest decrease among all sports.
In contrast, tennis showed a consistent upward trend. Starting at 150 participants in 1985, it gradually rose to 200 by 1995 and continued climbing steadily to reach approximately 230 by 2005, overtaking rugby as the most popular sport by the end of the period.
Basketball and badminton, on the other hand, showed little change. Basketball started with around 100 participants in 1985, saw a slight dip to 75 in 1990, and then returned to 100 by 1995, maintaining this level with minimal variation through to 2005. Similarly, badminton began with just over 50 players in 1985, dropped slightly below this figure by 1990, but stabilized at 50 for the remainder of the period.
In summary, while tennis experienced steady growth and rugby declined drastically, both badminton and basketball maintained relatively stable levels of participation throughout the period.
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