IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3396 – Band 7.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

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Candidate’s Response:

The line graph illustrates the number of shops that closed and opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Overall, there were significant fluctuations in both shop closures and openings throughout the period. Shop closures experienced a dramatic dip in 2015, while shop openings generally showed a declining trend towards the end of the period.

In terms of shop closures, the number started at around 6,500 in 2011. There was a slight increase to approximately 7,000 in 2013, which later in 2014 bounced back to almost the same number in 2011. The most noticeable change occurred in 2015, where the number of closures plummeted to just over 500. This was followed by a sharp rise back to around 5,000 in 2016, after which the numbers stabilized, ending at about 5,000 in 2018.

For shop openings, the numbers started higher than closures, at around 8,500 in 2011. However, there was a significant drop to approximately 4,000 in 2012. The number of openings then showed some recovery, reaching a peak of around 6,100 in 2014, before falling again to about 4,000 in 2015. From 2016 onwards, the number of openings gradually decreased, ending slightly below 3,000 in 2018.

In summary, while shop closures saw a dramatic dip in 2015 and then stabilized, the number of shop openings experienced a general decline with fluctuations over the period.

195 words

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

July 23, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

9.0 uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention

9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately

7.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 the communication is completely natural

8.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 communication is completely natural

7.0

7.5

Feedback:

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Task Achievement (TA): The task is addressed appropriately, with a clear introduction, detailed body paragraphs focusing on specific trends, and a concise conclusion. All key points from the graph are covered.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The response is well-organized with a logical progression of ideas. Linking words and phrases are used effectively to ensure smooth transitions between points.

Lexical Resource (LR): The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, effectively describing trends. However, some more complex or precise words could further improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The grammar is generally accurate with a good range of sentence structures. Minor errors are present, and more complex structures could enhance the score.

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

The line graph illustrates the number of shops that closed and opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Notably, 2014 stands out as a turning point for both shop closures and openings. Overall, there were significant fluctuations in both shop closures and openings throughout the period. Before 2014, both closures and openings showed notable variations, while after 2014, the trends changed markedly.

Before 2014, the number of shop closures and openings experienced substantial fluctuations. In 2011, shop closures were just above 6,000 and increased slightly to around 7,000 in 2012. They then decreased to about 6,000 in 2013. On the other hand, shop openings started higher at around 8,500 in 2011, but saw a steep decline to approximately 4,000 in 2012. By 2014, openings had recovered to around 6,500, indicating a period of volatility in both closures and openings.

After 2014, the trends shifted significantly. The number of shop closures saw a dramatic dip to just above 500 in 2015, followed by a sharp recovery to about 5,000 in 2016. From 2016 onwards, closures remained relatively stable, ending at about 5,000 in 2018. In contrast, shop openings continued to decline after 2014, dropping from 6,500 to around 4,000 by 2015 and then gradually decreasing to slightly below 4,000 by 2018.

In summary, 2014 marked a significant turning point in the trends of shop closures and openings, with closures experiencing a dramatic fluctuation and then stabilizing, while openings showed a continuous decline.

253 words