IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3395 – Band 7.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

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Candidate’s Response:

The bar chart illustrates how families in one country allocated their weekly income to various categories in 1968 and 2018. Overall, there were notable shifts in spending patterns over the 50 year period. In 1968 food was the largest expenditure, while in 2018, leisure took the lead.

In 2018, spending on certain categories increased compared to 1968. Housing saw a significant rise, increasing from about 10% to approximately 19% of weekly income. Transport expenditure also increased considerably, moving from just under 8% to around 14%. Clearly, the highest increase was for leisure expenses which went from 9% to 23%.

Conversely, several categories saw a decrease in spending by 2018. The proportion of income spent on food dropped significantly from around 35% to approximately 17%. Clothing and footwear expenditure also notably declined, reducing from about 10% to under 5%. Additionally, spending on fuel and power decreased slightly over the period.

In summary, while household goods’ spending remained relatively stable over the 50 years, there were significant increases in housing, leisure, and transport expenditures, alongside notable decreases in spending on food, personal goods, and clothing and footwear.

166 words

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

July 17, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately

7.0 could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

9.0 with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

9.0 with full flexibility and accuracy

8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

9.0 communication is completely natural

7.0

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Task Achievement (TA): The task is addressed appropriately, with clear introduction, detailed body paragraphs focused on specific trends, and a concise conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The response is well-organized, with a logical flow of information and clear comparisons. The body paragraphs are structured to highlight increases and decreases separately.

Lexical Resource (LR): The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, effectively describing trends. However, some more complex or precise words could further improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
The grammar is generally accurate with a good range of sentence structures. Minor errors are present, and more complex structures could enhance the score.

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The bar chart illustrates the average weekly expenditure of families in one country on various categories in 1968 and 2018. Overall, there were significant changes in spending patterns over the 50-year period. In 1968, food was the largest expense, whereas in 2018, housing became the predominant expenditure.

In 2018, there were noticeable increases in spending on several categories compared to 1968. Housing saw the most dramatic rise, increasing from around 10% to approximately 25% of weekly income. Expenditure on transport also grew substantially, rising from about eight percent to around 14%. Additionally, spending on household goods and personal goods experienced slight increases, indicating a shift in family priorities.

Conversely, certain categories experienced a decrease in spending by 2018. The proportion of weekly income spent on food dropped significantly from around 35% in 1968 to just under 15% in 2018. Spending on clothing and footwear also declined markedly, falling from about ten percent to under five percent. Moreover, the expenditure on fuel and power showed a slight reduction over the period.

In summary, while spending on leisure remained relatively unchanged, there were significant increases in housing and transport expenditures, alongside notable decreases in spending on food and clothing.

195 words