IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3389 – Band 7.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

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Candidate’s Response:

The provided table tabulates data on the budget sources of the police in a certain area in the UK. The two given pie charts show the distribution of the acquired money in three sectors, namely salaries to officers and staff, technology, and building and transport. The budget is given in million pounds in two consecutive years, 2017 and 2018. It is evident that more than half the police budget came from National Government.

In 2017, the total police budget was 304.7 million pounds. More than half the budget, i.e 175.5 million GBP, was procured by National government. In the second place, local taxes contributed 91.2 million pounds. The rest was appropriated via other sources such as grants. Three quarters of the money was spent on salaries for the police officers and staff. The remainder of the budget was allocated to building and transport (17 percent) and technology (eight percent).

In 2018, all budget sources increased slightly in comparison to the numbers in 2017. National government went up by 2.3 million pounds reaching 177.8 million GBP. Local taxes went up from 91.2 to 102.3 million pounds. The change for other sources was insignificant. Budget allocation increased in favor of technology, approximately doubled the 2017 level at 14 percent. Salaries to officers and staff went down six percent, making up 69 percent of the budget allocation in 2018.

Overall, buildings and transport was a line in budget that remained completely unchanged in both years.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

July 10, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. The response is strong overall and demonstrates good command of the language. By making minor adjustments to improve precision and clarity, the score could potentially be raised to an 8.

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The provided table and pie charts illustrate the police budget in one area of the UK for 2017 and 2018. The table shows the sources of the budget, while the pie charts display how the money was distributed across three sectors: salaries, technology, and buildings and transport. The budget amounts are in million pounds.

In 2017, the total police budget was £304.7 million. The largest portion, £175.5 million, came from the National Government. Local taxes contributed £91.2 million, and other sources, such as grants, provided £38 million. The majority of the budget (75%) was allocated to salaries for officers and staff. Buildings and transport received 17% of the budget, and technology was allocated 8%.

In 2018, the total budget increased to £318.6 million. Funding from the National Government rose slightly to £177.8 million. Local taxes saw a significant increase, contributing £102.3 million. Other sources increased marginally to £38.5 million. The allocation for salaries decreased to 69%, while the budget for technology doubled to 14%. The proportion for buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17%.

Overall, the police budget saw a slight increase in funding across all sources in 2018 compared to 2017. While the proportion of the budget allocated to salaries decreased, the funding for technology saw a notable increase, reflecting a shift in budget priorities. The allocation for buildings and transport remained consistent over the two years.

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