IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3377 – Band 6.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Economy and Business, Society and Community, Task 1 report, Writing samples

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Candidate’s Response:

The bar chart illustrates the number of American families in five categories based on their income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.The number of households whose salaries were less than $25,000 increased in 2015 compared to 2007.

Three groups of families with income less than $25,000, between $25,000 and $49,999, and more than $100,000 made up the larger part of the community. In 2007, the income of almost 25 million families was less than 25,000 dollars, which increased in 2011 and reached almost a little less than 30 million families, but in 2015, it decreased a little and reached about 27 million. Families with an income between 25,000 and 49,999 dollars were approximately 26 million families in 2007, which reached 30 million in 2011, but slightly decreased in 2015. Families whose income was more than 100,000 dollars in 2007 was almost 30 million families, but in 2011, it decreased to about 2.5 million, yet but in 2015, with the biggest change, it reached about 33 million.

Families with incomes between $50,000 and $74,000, and $75,000 and $99,999 did not change much. The number of families whose income was between 50,000 and 74,999 dollars did not change during the three years and was always slightly more than 25 million families, but the group whose income was between 75,000 and 99,999 dollars decreased a little in 2011, but increased again in 2015. and reached 15 million families.

The most common change was related to income of more than 100,000 dollars. The income of 50,000 to 74,999 dollars was almost unchanged.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

June 29, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. Task Achievement (TA):
Strengths: The response summarizes the main features and makes some comparisons.
Areas for Improvement: Some details are inaccurate, and there is occasional misinterpretation of the data. There is a need for more precise and relevant selection of details to support the main features effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
Strengths: The report is generally organized with some logical sequencing of information.
Areas for Improvement: Cohesion is somewhat mechanical and forced at times. The progression between sentences and ideas could be smoother. Some sentences are long and complex, leading to reduced clarity.

Lexical Resource (LR):
Strengths: Adequate range of vocabulary is used to describe the chart.
Areas for Improvement: There are occasional errors in word choice and collocation, and some repetitive vocabulary. More precise and varied vocabulary would enhance the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
Strengths: A range of grammatical structures is used, and some complex sentences are attempted.
Areas for Improvement: Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation reduce clarity. There are issues with verb tense consistency and article usage. Greater accuracy and control over complex sentence structures are needed.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of households in the US categorized by annual income in the years 2007, 2011, and 2015.

In 2007, households earning less than $25,000 numbered nearly 25 million, increasing to just under 30 million in 2011 before slightly decreasing to about 27 million in 2015. Households with incomes between $25,000 and $49,999 followed a similar pattern, starting at approximately 26 million in 2007, rising to 30 million in 2011, and then slightly declining by 2015.

The group earning $50,000 to $74,999 remained relatively stable, consistently slightly above 25 million throughout the period. In contrast, those earning between $75,000 and $99,999 saw a minor dip in 2011 but rebounded to 15 million by 2015.

Notably, households with incomes exceeding $100,000 experienced significant growth. In 2007, there were about 30 million households in this category. This number dipped to around 27.5 million in 2011 but surged to 33 million in 2015, marking the most substantial change among all categories.

Overall, the data reveals a notable increase in higher-income households, while lower-income categories also saw fluctuations during these years.

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