IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3376 – Band 5.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

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Candidate’s Response:

The bar chart compares the numbers of male and female students pursuing six different categories of art subjects at one of the universities in the UK in 2011.

Overall, it appears that females dominated males in five of the study areas. The highest number of both males and females were enrolled in the English language and Literature class, where 250 accounted for the latter and 225, for the former. The lowest enrolment of was 50 males in the class of Philosophy and for females the figure was twice the number but, in the History and Archeology section. The linguistics, and Communication and Media studies comprised of an almost equal number of females studying the courses, whereas their male counterparts ~~have~~ had a reasonable differences.

In ~~contrary~~ contrast to domination from females, only the section of Art and Design attracted more male candidates ~~then~~ than female ones, with a difference of 25.

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Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 30, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

6.0 presents and adequately highlights key features

7.0 could be more fully extended

6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0 presents information with some organization

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

5.0 may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate

5.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.0 uses only a limited range of structures

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

5.0 errors can cause some difficulty for the reader

5.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. The most important issue with this report is its word count; it is subject to under-length error and that is why you lose a lot of marks.
Expand the response to meet the word count requirement, providing more detailed analysis and comparisons.
Organize the response with clear paragraphs and logical progression of ideas.
Improve lexical resource by using varied and precise vocabulary.
Focus on grammatical accuracy, ensuring correct use of complex sentences and proper punctuation.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of male and female students enrolled in six different categories of art subjects at a university in the UK in 2011. Overall, it is evident that females outnumbered males in five out of the six categories, with Art and Design being the exception where more males were enrolled.

The most popular subject among both genders was English Language and Literature, with 250 female students and 225 male students. This category had the highest enrollment for both genders. In contrast, the least popular subject for males was Philosophy, with only 50 enrollments, whereas the lowest female enrollment was in History and Archeology, with slightly over 100 students.

Interestingly, the enrollment figures for Linguistics and Communication and Media Studies were quite balanced between the genders. In these categories, the numbers of female students were almost equal to those of their male counterparts, showing only minor differences.

In stark contrast to the overall trend, Art and Design saw a higher number of male students, with 200 males compared to 175 females. This was the only category where male students outnumbered females by 25.

In summary, while female students generally dominated in most art subjects, Art and Design was an outlier with a higher number of male enrollments. This indicates varying preferences between genders in different art disciplines.

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