IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3374 – Band 6.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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Candidate’s Response:

The line graph displays information about the fraction of the population that lives in urban centres in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with estimations for the years 2030 and 2040.

Overall, urbanisation increased in all countries from 1970 to 2020 and is forecast to continue this trend in 2030 and 2040. Malaysia and Indonesia will experience a dramatic rise, while the Philippines and Thailand are predicted to display a more gradual incline.

In 1970, only 30 percent of Malaysians lived in cities; initially, this figure increased gradually to hit ~~40%~~ 45% in 1990, then soared to roughly 60% in the next 10 years. The uptrend is predicted to continue, just surpassing the 80% mark in 2040. Inhabitants of Indonesia living in urban centres were the lowest at the beginning of the period at approximately 15%; the percentage increased more steadily in the next 30 years, reaching roughly 25 percent in 2000. The trend is estimated to be similar to that of Malaysia, peaking at around 60% by 2040.

The Philippines and Thailand displayed a similar trend~~, however,~~ ; however, the Philippines fluctuated more at the beginning of the period; both will steadily rise towards the end. While the Philippines started the period at the highest number of city dwellers at just above 30%, it is predicted to finish the given period as the third highest at just over 50%. Thailand, on the other hand, started the period as the third highest at just under a fifth living in cities, and is forecast to finish as the lowest by 2040 at just over 40%.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

September 12, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. The response accurately describes the main trends and provides a clear overview of the data, effectively summarizing key points and making relevant comparisons. It is well-organized with logical transitions and effective use of cohesion devices, though occasional inconsistencies in flow are present. A good range of vocabulary is used accurately, with minor repetition and a few word choice errors. The candidate demonstrates a variety of sentence structures, but occasional grammatical errors and punctuation issues slightly detract from clarity. Overall, the response meets the task requirements well, achieving a Band 7 score. To improve, the candidate should provide more detailed descriptions and ensure all grammatical and lexical elements are correct.

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The line graph illustrates the percentage of the population residing in urban areas in four Asian countries—Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia—from 1970 to 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, the graph reveals a continuous upward trend in urbanization across all four countries throughout the period. Malaysia and Indonesia are expected to see the most significant increases, whereas the Philippines and Thailand will experience a more moderate rise.

In 1970, approximately 30% of Malaysia's population lived in cities, increasing steadily to 40% by 1990. Following this, the urban population surged to around 60% by 2000 and is projected to exceed 80% by 2040. In Indonesia, the urban population was the lowest among the four countries in 1970 at around 15%. This figure rose gradually, reaching approximately 25% by 2000. The trend is expected to continue, with the urban population reaching about 60% by 2040.

The Philippines had the highest urban population at the beginning of the period, just above 30%. Despite some fluctuations, it is forecasted to increase steadily, finishing the period at slightly over 50%. Thailand, starting with less than 20% urban population in 1970, showed a consistent upward trend. By 2040, Thailand is projected to have the lowest urban population among the four countries, at just over 40%.

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