IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3371 – Band 7.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

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Candidate’s Response:

The line graph illustrates the urban population percentages in four Asian countries—Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia—over the period from 1970 to 2020, along with projections for 2030 and 2040.

Overall, the trend shows a steady increase in the urban population across all four countries, although the rates of increase vary. In 1970, the Philippines had the highest urban population at around 30%, while Indonesia had the lowest, with approximately 15%. By 2020, Malaysia had surpassed the other countries, reaching about 75%, followed by the Philippines at roughly 50%. Thailand and Indonesia saw significant growth as well, with urban populations of around 40% and 55%, respectively.

Looking ahead, the projections suggest that urbanization will continue to rise in all four countries. Malaysia is expected to maintain its leading position, approaching 85% by 2040. The Philippines’ urban population is anticipated to grow to about 65%, while Indonesia is projected to see a substantial increase to around 65% as well. Thailand is expected to have the slowest growth, with its urban population reaching around 50%.

In conclusion, while all four countries are experiencing growth in their urban populations, Malaysia and the Philippines are expected to continue leading in urbanization rates, with Indonesia showing significant future growth, and Thailand gradually increasing its urban population.

195 words

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

June 23, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

6.0 addresses the requirements of the task

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

5.0 presents no clear overview

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 the communication is completely natural

8.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

9.0 uses a wide range of structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 communication is completely natural

8.0

7.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this report. Task Achievement (TA):
Strengths: The response addresses all parts of the task, summarizing the main features of the graph and making relevant comparisons. It clearly describes the trends and provides specific data points.
Areas for Improvement: The summary could benefit from a more explicit overview of the main trends before delving into specific details. Including a clearer statement at the beginning to outline the general trend of increasing urbanization would enhance clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
Strengths: The answer is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. There are appropriate linking phrases and words that help the flow of information.
Areas for Improvement: Some sentences could be better linked to improve overall coherence. For example, transitions between discussing different countries and time periods could be smoother.

Lexical Resource (LR):
Strengths: A good range of vocabulary is used to describe the data, with appropriate word choices such as "illustrates," "steady increase," "surpassed," and "anticipated."
Areas for Improvement: There are some repetitions (e.g., "urban population") that could be varied to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary. Using synonyms or paraphrasing would help in this regard.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
Strengths: The answer demonstrates a good control of grammar, with accurate use of tenses and sentence structures. There are no significant grammatical errors that impede understanding.
Areas for Improvement: While the grammar is mostly accurate, there could be more complex structures to showcase a higher grammatical range.

Overall:
This response meets the requirements for a Band 7 in all criteria. To improve further, the candidate should aim to enhance the clarity and coherence of the overview, use a wider range of vocabulary, and incorporate more complex grammatical structures.

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The line graph provides data on the percentage of people living in urban areas in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with forecasts extending to 2030 and 2040. Overall, the urban population in all four countries has increased consistently over the observed period, and this upward trend is expected to continue into the future.

Initially, in 1970, the Philippines had the highest proportion of urban residents, with about 30%, while Indonesia had the lowest at roughly 15%. Over the next fifty years, Malaysia experienced the most dramatic increase, reaching nearly 75% by 2020, making it the country with the highest urbanization rate. By comparison, the Philippines had an urban population of about 45%, Indonesia around 50%, and Thailand approximately 30%.

Projections for 2030 and 2040 indicate further growth in urban populations. Malaysia is set to solidify its lead, with urban residents making up nearly 85% of its total population by 2040. The Philippines and Indonesia are both expected to reach around 60% by 2040, with Indonesia showing particularly rapid growth. Thailand, while experiencing the slowest rate of urbanization, is still expected to see its urban population rise to about 50% by 2040.

In summary, the data reveals that while all four countries are on a path of increasing urbanization, Malaysia is leading this trend, followed by the Philippines and Indonesia, with Thailand showing steady but slower growth. The predictions suggest that this pattern will persist, emphasizing the continuing shift towards urban living in these Asian nations.

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