IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3369 – Band 5.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The line graph below illustrates the average price of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014. In the first month of the year, the price of nickel was higher than the other two metals.

The highest amount of changes was related to nickel. In March, the price of nickel became one-sixth compared to January, and after that it remained stable for a month. In May, it decreased a little and reached its lowest value in the middle of the year. During the month, it increased about two times and was stable for three months. It decreased slightly in October compared to September, but increased again in the following month and was stable until December.

Cooper did not change much compared to the other two metals. At the beginning of the year, it was in the second place, and at the end of the year, with a slight decrease, it was still in the second place. Until the middle of the year, the price of Cooper was decreasing compared to the beginning of the year, but then it increased a little and was stable for three months. From September to October, it decreased a little again and remained stable until November, and finally increased a little in December.

Zinc was in the last place at the beginning of the year. The price of zinc in February was about three times twice as high as in January, and then it decreased in four months. It increased slightly in the seventh month of the year and was stable for three months, but decreased again in October. In November, it tripled with the increase in price and reached the first place in December.

Overall, At the end of the year, the ranking of zinc and nickel was changed in terms of price, and Cooper had the least changes.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

June 17, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

7.0 clearly presents and highlights key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

5.5

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Task Achievement (TA):
The response addresses the task and presents the main features, but some details are inaccurately reported or unclear. Comparisons are made but could be more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
The response is logically organized, but transitions between ideas are sometimes abrupt. Repetition of phrases affects the overall flow.

Lexical Resource (LR):
The candidate uses a reasonable range of vocabulary, but there are inaccuracies and repetition. Some expressions are awkwardly phrased.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentences with noticeable errors. The grammatical range is limited, and there are issues with verb forms, articles, and pluralization.

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The line graph illustrates the average monthly percentage changes in the prices of copper, nickel, and zinc throughout 2014. Overall, these metals exhibited significant fluctuations in their prices, with distinct trends observed for each.

Nickel showed the most volatility. It started the year with a sharp increase, peaking at nearly 6% in January, but then dropped dramatically to around 1% by March. The price change continued to decline, reaching -2% in May, indicating a decrease in prices compared to the previous month. Following a brief period of stability, nickel's price changes improved slightly in July and remained stable for a few months. There was a minor dip in October before it rose again in November, ending the year positively.

Copper's price changes were more moderate. Beginning at about 2% in January, the rate of increase gradually declined, turning negative in June at -2%. The second half of the year saw a slight recovery in price changes, stabilizing around 1% towards the end of the year. Copper maintained a relatively steady pattern with less dramatic fluctuations compared to nickel and zinc.

Zinc exhibited a distinct pattern, initially rising to 3% in February before experiencing a steady decline to -2% in June. From July onwards, zinc’s monthly price changes began to recover, showing significant positive changes in November and ultimately leading the price changes among the three metals by December, with an increase of about 2%.

In conclusion, nickel experienced the most dramatic monthly price changes, zinc demonstrated a strong recovery towards the end of the year, and copper showed a relatively stable trend. These variations highlight the differing market dynamics affecting each metal in 2014.

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