IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3357 – Band 7.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

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Candidate’s Response:

The illustration depicts the method how recycling plastic bottles is done.

Overall, it is a cyclical, man-made process and consists of nine phases. Bottles are broken-down into raw ingredients in order to produce items like containers and T-shirts.

First of all, a person throws out a plastic bottle in a designated recycling pin which a reprocessing truck picks up and empties into its container. In the recycling centre, an employee selects which bottles are suitable for repurposing and discard the damaged bottles that are unsuitable for reusing; after that, they are compressed into blocks. From this, the cubes pass through two crushing wheels which dismantle them into smaller pieces, next they are placed in a water-filled holder and washed.

Following that, the now-clean pieces are dumped in a pellet-producing machine and subsequently heated, and then raw materials are formed. The raw materials are molded to produce several products, such as containers, water bottles, T-shirts, pencils, and reusable bags.

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Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 22, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

9.0 fully satisfies all the requirements of the task

9.0 clearly presents a fully developed response

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

9.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

7.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

8.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free

8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

7.5

Feedback:

The provided description of the recycling process for plastic bottles captures the sequence of events accurately and provides a clear overview. However, to align with the IELTS writing task 1 band descriptors, there are areas that could be improved:

Task Achievement (TA): The response covers all stages of the process but could benefit from more precise language when describing the steps. For instance, "reprocessing truck" could be more clearly described as a "collection vehicle," and "designated recycling pin" could be refined to "designated recycling bin."

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The text is logically organized and follows the process sequentially. However, the use of cohesive devices such as "after that" and "following that" can be overused. Varying these with synonyms or other linking phrases could improve the flow of information.

Lexical Resource (LR): The vocabulary is generally appropriate, with terms like "repurposing," "compressed," and "raw materials" used effectively. Yet, there's room for a wider range of vocabulary. For example, "an employee selects which bottles are suitable" could be more succinctly expressed as "workers sort the bottles."

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The grammar used is mostly accurate, with appropriate use of past participles and passive constructions. However, the phrase "a person throws out a plastic bottle in a designated recycling pin" should be corrected to "a person throws a plastic bottle into a designated recycling bin." Additionally, "the cubes pass through two crushing wheels" could be more accurately described as "the blocks are then crushed into smaller pieces."

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

The diagram illustrates the steps involved in recycling plastic bottles. The process begins with the collection of bottles and ends with the production of various end products from the recycled material.

In the first stage, used plastic bottles are gathered and placed into a large bin, which is then transported by a collection vehicle to a recycling center. Upon arrival at the recycling facility, the second phase commences, which involves sorting the bottles. Workers at the recycling center manually separate the plastic bottles from other waste materials, ensuring that only plastic proceeds to the next step.

Following sorting, the third stage is the compression of the plastic bottles into compact blocks. This makes transportation and handling of the recycled materials easier and more efficient. The compressed blocks are then crushed into smaller pieces, preparing them for further processing.

In the fifth stage, these crushed pieces of plastic are washed clean. After being thoroughly cleaned, the plastic fragments are processed into small pellets. These pellets are then heated until they form a raw material, which serves as the base for creating new products.

Finally, the raw material derived from the heated pellets is used to manufacture a variety of end products. The diagram shows that these recycled plastics can be turned into new plastic bottles, clothing items such as T-shirts, and even items like pens. This completes the recycling loop, demonstrating how plastic bottles can be reused in a number of different forms.

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