IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3345 – Band 5.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The supplied chart below enumerates the percentage of households in both owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales among (1918) and (2011).

Moving to the first chart percentage of households in owned accommodation in 1918, was nearly a fifth, whereas household in rented accommodation jumped to approximately three quarters. In 1939, household in owned house raised to almost less than a third however, percentage of households in rented accommodation plummeted to nearly 68 percent. In 1953, percentage of households in owned house remained steady as well as households in rented accommodation. In 1961, households in owned accommodation increased in contrast with 1953, 1939 and 1918 which almost reached to two fifths and on the other hand, percentage of households in rented house dropped in comparison to 1918, 1939 and 1953.

Moving to the fifth chart in 1971, the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation were precisely same as each other which are 50 percent. In 1981, the percentage of households in owned house enhanced to nearly seven in ten, whereas percentage of households in rented accommodation collapsed to roughly 30 percent. In 1991, the rate of households in owned house reached to approximately 70 percent but then again the rate of households in rented accommodation decreased to more than a third. Eventually, the percentage of households in 2001, touched the vertex and percentage of the households in rented accommodation remained unchanged in contrast to 1991 which was 30 percent. In 2011, households in owned accommodation with changing sporadically reached to almost two thirds but the percentage of rented accommodation households with a minority change reached to almost more than a third.

Overall, the percentage of households in owned accommodation from 1918 dramatically raised with changes intermittently until 2011, whereas the rate of households in rented accommodation begins with highest percentage and decreased continuously until 2001 except 2011 which reached to nearly 35 percent.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

May 9, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The total number of 317 for task one, which needs 150 words) is twice the requirement, putting us in danger of making more errors and exposing more mistakes. In addition, IELTS demands that we "summarize" the information by "selecting" and reporting the "main" features; in other words, we do not need to report task 1 charts data by data. Identifying the main features is an important element in IELTS scoring.

In addition, there is only one bar chart in the task; those vertical elements should be referred to as "bars," not "charts."


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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)
6.0 addresses the requirements of the task
6.0 presents and adequately highlights key features
5.0 there may be a tendency to focus on details
9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages
5.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
6.0 there is a clear overall progression
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically
6.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
5.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The total number of 317 for task one, which needs 150 words) is twice the requirement, putting us in danger of making more errors and exposing more mistakes. In addition, IELTS demands that we "summarize" the information by "selecting" and reporting the "main" features; in other words, we do not need to report task 1 charts data by data. Identifying the main features is an important element in IELTS scoring.

In addition, there is only one bar chart in the task; those vertical elements should be referred to as "bars," not "charts."

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The 5.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The chart shows the percentage of households owning and renting accommodation in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. The percentage of households owning accommodation has steadily increased over this period, while the percentage of households renting has steadily decreased.
In 1918, the homeownership rate was about 55 percentage points higher than the renting rate. By 1939, this gap had narrowed to 34 percentage points and remained constant in 1953 with owned accommodation at 32% and rentals at 68%. By 1961, the gap between the homeownership rate and the renting rate shrank to 18 percentage points. This was the smallest gap between the two rates during the period shown in the chart before they both stood at the same rate (50%) in 1979 with no gap in between.
From 1979 onwards, the gap between the homeownership rate and the renting rate reappearing this time in favor of house ownership. For the first time in 1981, owned accommodation stood at just above 60% which was 20% higher than that of rental accommodations. This trend continued till 2001 when house ownership reached its peak at slightly shy of 70 percent. The chart ends in 2011 with a slight decrease in ownership rate (65%).
Overall, the percentage of households owning accommodation in England and Wales has steadily increased over the past century, while the percentage of households renting has steadily decreased. The gap between the homeownership rate and the renting rate has fluctuated over time.
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