IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3323 – Band 7.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The provided plans draw a comparison on how the public park called “Grange Park” looked like in its opening year (1920) and its appearance nowadays. Overall, this recreation area has undergone significant changes during the period in question.

To begin with, the fountain that was built in the center of the park has been taken off and replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. In the past there were three installments of rose grounds, from which only the one situated in the left-hand upper side remained untaken. The park contains also a special facility for musicians. In the recent plan, on the left side it is seen an amphitheater for concerts that has taken the place of the stage.

Significant modifications have been made to the far right part of the park, too. Namely, in the place of pond for water plants we can notice a children’s play area and the water feature on the opposite side that replaced the glasshouse once built there. Under the water feature there has been added an underground car parking.

It is noteworthy to mention that the park entrances are still in the same areas as they were in 1920; The visitors can enter the ground either from the Arnold avenue or from the opposite side through Eldon street. If entered via the former side, one can see a café on the left that has taken the place of one of the aforementioned rose gardens.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

October 25, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)
9.0 fully satisfies all the requirements of the task
8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately
9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.
8.0
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
9.0 uses a wide range of structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
9.0 communication is completely natural
8.0
7.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The report’s strongest suit is how logically almost all features are reported and developed. As for cohesion, some sentences have not-very-smooth transitions, but it does not mean they are inaccurate. Vocabulary-wise, maybe more correct word order and word formation is needed.

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

The provided maps depict the evolution of Grange Park, a public space that was established in 1920, and its current state. In general, the park's layout has undergone a significant transformation, introducing modern facilities while eliminating some natural features. These modifications have significantly improved the park's accessibility and functionality.
The most notable change is the replacement of the stage for musicians with a spacious amphitheater designed for hosting concerts. Additionally, the rose gardens, previously scattered around the park's periphery, have been relocated to the park's center, except for the northwest rose garden, which has been preserved in its original location. The rose garden to the right of the north entrance has been transformed into a café, and a new children's play area has been introduced just further to the East, replacing the former water plant pond.
Further modifications include the removal of the glasshouse and the introduction of additional seating options throughout the park. Notably, in the southeast corner, an underground entrance to a car park has been added. While the park's general layout remains recognizable, these newly incorporated features have significantly enhanced its accessibility and overall appeal to its visitors.
In summary, the changes to Grange Park over the past century have retained its historical essence while making it a more inviting and functional destination.
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