IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3311 – Band 6.5

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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The pie charts illustrate the share of various fuel sources for producing electricity in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000. It can be clearly seen that in Australia, coal was the main source both in 1980 and 2000.

Looking at the pie charts related to Australia it is evident that the rate of using coal for electricity production significantly increased from 50 units in 1980 to 130 units in 2000. Conversely, the usage rate for other fuel sources including oil, natural gas, and hydro power experienced a sharp drop from 10,20 and 20 units to 2 units for all the three.

Moving on to the pie charts related to france, in 1980, the highest rate belongs to natural gas and coal with both having 25 units at the whole share. In addition, while nuclear power was used at 15 units rate in 1980, its usage was surged to 120 units in 2000. The use of oil , on the other hand remained approximately the same in both 1980 and 2000 with only 5 units difference, being higher in 2000.

Oversal, comparing the charts related to australia and france one significant difference is that while nuclear power in france was the major fuel source for electricity production in 2000. It was not used in australia at all either in 1980 or 2000.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

September 9, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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Disclaimer

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

6.0 presents and adequately highlights key features

6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

7.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The report fails to mention the Total Production for each country in both years; this is considered key information, so it is imperative to see those numbers in the report.
On a different note, this report suffers from a factual mistake which is a common error for IELTS reports. As for grammar, since the visual is all in the past, the majority of verb tenses must be in the past-tense format.The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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The pie charts offer a comparison of electricity production in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000, measured in units (millions). In 1980, Australia produced 100 units of electricity, while France generated 70 units. By 2000, Australia's production rose to 170 units, whereas France's surged to 180 units.

Coal was the dominant source in Australia in 1980, constituting 50% of production, which decreased to 45% in 2000. In France, coal contributed only 20% in 1980, declining to 10% by 2000. Natural gas increased in importance in both countries. In 1980, it was around 15% in Australia, growing to nearly 30% in 2000. France had minimal usage in 1980, but it equaled Australia's share by 2000.

Hydroelectric power contributed 20% in Australia in 1980 and remained stable in 2000. France, with 40% in 1980, saw it decrease to 30% in 2000. Nuclear power played a substantial role in France, increasing from 30% in 1980 to 35% in 2000. Australia had negligible nuclear power in both years. Renewable sources, less than 5% collectively in 1980, increased in Australia to 10% by 2000. France's reliance on renewables remained under 5%.

In summary, over two decades, Australia's electricity production grew from 100 to 170 units. Coal remained pivotal, but natural gas and renewables gained importance. France's production increased from 70 to 180 units, with reduced coal usage and increased nuclear power. Both nations saw a rise in natural gas usage, while hydroelectric power remained significant in Australia and nuclear power in France. Renewables had a modest but growing share in Australia, while France maintained a lower reliance on them.

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