IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3310 – Band 7.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The bar chart given illustrates the percentage of the UK and international learners who acquired second class degrees or higher in 8 courses at a major UK university in 2009. Evidently, the graph shows that the home students did considerably better in humanistic and social-based disciplines, whereas international postgraduates were more successful in programs related to technology.

Every four Britons out of five gained master’s degree or higher in sociology and art history, making these two disciplines reach the highest percentages for them. English came next with roughly 75 per cent of all UK students succeeding in academic study of their native language, followed by international law with approximately 70 per cent (versus fewer than one out of two for students from abroad).

Concerning the scholars from abroad, they reached 85 per cent success ratio in information technology, the highest rate across all fields of the studies given. The majority of International postgraduates (80 per cent) acquired second degree or higher also in electrical engineering; whereas in nursing and accountancy, learners of both categories achieved the same shares (75 per cent and 60 per cent respectively).

In brief, the success rate of both groups of students was 45 per cent or higher in all disciplines in question.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

September 11, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. This report suffers from a couple of factual mistakes. The report must completely reflect the data presented on the visual; in addition to that, all IELTS reports must not include information from external sources, i.e. personal or professional experience, judgement, or interpretation.


Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)
8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately
6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate
9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages
6.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
9.0 uses a wide range of structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’
9.0 communication is completely natural
8.0
7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. This report suffers from a couple of factual mistakes. The report must completely reflect the data presented on the visual; in addition to that, all IELTS reports must not include information from external sources, i.e. personal or professional experience, judgement, or interpretation.

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The graph presents a comparison of the proportions of UK and international students who achieved second-class degrees or higher at a prominent UK university in 2009. The data is divided across multiple academic disciplines, including nursing, electrical engineering, information technology, English literature, art history, accountancy, international law, and sociology.
In the nursing discipline, both UK and international students exhibited comparable success rates, with each group achieving around 70%.
Moving to electrical engineering, UK students fared better, obtaining roughly 80% of second-class degrees or higher, while international students achieved about 60%. Similarly, in information technology, the gap was more pronounced, with approximately 85% of international students achieving success, compared to around 58% of UK students.
For English literature, UK students excelled, securing about 78% of the degrees, whereas international students achieved approximately 57%. Art history revealed similar trends, with UK students achieving 80% and international students reaching around 67%.
In the realm of accountancy, both UK and international students displayed similar performance, each group achieving approximately 60% of the degrees.
International law demonstrated a substantial divergence, as around 70% of international students achieved success in contrast to about 43% of UK students. Lastly, in sociology, both UK and international students performed well, attaining around 80% and 78% of the degrees respectively.
In summary, the graph illustrates varying percentages of UK and international students obtaining second-class degrees or better in different academic disciplines at a major UK university in 2009. Notably, there were fields where UK students outperformed their international counterparts, while in certain subjects such as international law, the reverse was observed, highlighting distinct academic disparities between the two student groups.
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