IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3156 – Band 4.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The pie chart and table could noticed that what reasons are pivotal and essential for demolishing lands.

Overall, as can be seen from the the most effective causes of land degradation is over-grazing by worldwide and it is clear from the table that Europe is a region which have the most impression on the land degradation.

Getting back to details, the first and more importantly reason for demolishing is over-grazing by some domestic animals which its percentage is 35% after that the second reason is deforestation which its percentage is similar to over-grazing approximately (30%),the third reason is over-cultivation that is roughly a quarter and the last one is some other reasons that is included a tiny fraction.

As is illustrated by the table, the most percentage of over-grazing which was the main reason on the pie chart above is allocated to Oceania which is included some islands such as Australia and New Zealand; moreover, the enormous percentage of deforestation that was the second reason on the pie chart is relevant to Europe region.

173 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 9, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 4.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

4.0 attempts to address the task but does not cover all key features; the format may be inappropriate

5.0 presents, but inadequately covers, key features

5.0 there may be a tendency to focus on details

5.0 presents no clear overview

4.0

Coherence and Cohesion

5.0 presents information with some organization

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

5.0 makes inadequate, inaccurate, or over-use of cohesive devices

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

5.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

5.0 that may cause some difficulty for the reader

5.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

5.0 attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences

5.0 makes frequent grammatical errors, and punctuation may be faulty

5.0 errors can cause some difficulty for the reader

5.0

4.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The response does not sufficiently address the requirements of the task. The comparison and contrast of data between the pie chart and the table are not clear. Vocabulary is limited and often inaccurately used, and there are multiple grammatical errors. The overall band score reflects a performance that struggles to communicate the main features of the graph and table due to these issues.

To improve, the report should focus on accurately presenting data with appropriate units, making clear comparisons, using a wider range of vocabulary correctly, and constructing grammatically correct sentences.

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The pie chart illustrates the primary causes of agricultural land becoming less productive globally, while the table details the impact of these factors on land degradation in North America, Europe, and Oceania during the 1990s.

It is apparent from the pie chart that over-grazing is the most significant factor contributing to land degradation worldwide, accounting for 35% of the total. This is closely followed by deforestation at 30%, and over-cultivation at 28%. Other reasons comprise a smaller share of 7%.

Turning to the table, Europe emerged as the region most affected by land degradation, with 23% of its land impacted. Deforestation was notably prevalent in Europe, responsible for degrading 9.8% of land, which was the highest among the regions compared. Over-cultivation also played a significant role in Europe, affecting 7.7% of land. North America showed a much lower overall percentage of land degradation at 5%, with over-cultivation being the primary cause at 3.3%. Over-grazing, while the leading cause globally, was the least of the concerns in North America, with only 1.5% of land affected. In Oceania, over-grazing was responsible for the degradation of a considerable 11.3% of the land, despite no impact from over-cultivation.

In summary, while over-grazing is the dominant cause of land degradation worldwide, regional effects vary, with Europe being most heavily impacted by deforestation and over-cultivation, and Oceania by over-grazing. North America, on the other hand, reported lower rates of land degradation across all factors.

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