IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3107 – Band 5.5

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

The milling chart shows people who live in their owned accommodations or in the rented on , in percent of housholds between years 1918 to 2011 in England and Wales.

Overall , the percent of people who lived in the rented house have decreased in this period , and consequently the percent of people who buy the house increased also.

In the year 1971 , the percent of people who have their own house and who rented a house was the same , and it is the 50-50% of household Before this year , in the first year of the period more than 75% of population lived in the rented house . In the other side , less than 25% of households have their own house .

The rented house people in the years 1939 , 1953 , and 1961 wew almost the same but falling in a moderate rate form more than 75% in 1918 to around 60% in 1961 . On the other side , the owner house people have increased after 1971 . After this year , those type of households increased almost rapidly between 60% to 70% in the 2007 years of this period .

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

February 9, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The key trends in the chart are identified, including the decrease in rented accommodations and the increase in owned accommodations over the years. There are issues with precision and clarity in the description of specific percentages, affecting overall task achievement. The response lacks a clear overall structure. Information is presented in a somewhat disorganized manner, making it challenging for the reader to follow. There's a need for more explicit linking between sentences and paragraphs. While some vocabulary is used to convey information, there is room for improvement. There are inaccuracies, such as "milling chart" instead of "given chart," and awkward phrasing. More varied vocabulary could enhance the overall quality of the response. There are grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures throughout the response, affecting clarity and coherence. Issues with verb tense consistency and subject-verb agreement are noticeable. The response attempts to describe the trends in owned and rented accommodations but is hindered by inaccuracies and unclear expressions. The report ought to focus on improving precision, clarity, and grammatical accuracy for a more effective and polished analysis.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)
6.0 addresses the requirements of the task
6.0 presents and adequately highlights key features
6.0 details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate
6.0 presents an overview with information appropriately selected
6.0
Coherence and Cohesion
5.0 presents information with some organization
6.0 there is a clear overall progression
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically
5.0
Lexical Resource
6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
5.0 that may cause some difficulty for the reader
5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
5.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. The key trends in the chart are identified, including the decrease in rented accommodations and the increase in owned accommodations over the years. There are issues with precision and clarity in the description of specific percentages, affecting overall task achievement. The response lacks a clear overall structure. Information is presented in a somewhat disorganized manner, making it challenging for the reader to follow. There's a need for more explicit linking between sentences and paragraphs. While some vocabulary is used to convey information, there is room for improvement. There are inaccuracies, such as "milling chart" instead of "given chart," and awkward phrasing. More varied vocabulary could enhance the overall quality of the response. There are grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures throughout the response, affecting clarity and coherence. Issues with verb tense consistency and subject-verb agreement are noticeable. The response attempts to describe the trends in owned and rented accommodations but is hindered by inaccuracies and unclear expressions. The report ought to focus on improving precision, clarity, and grammatical accuracy for a more effective and polished analysis.

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An Above 7.0 Sample

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of households in England and Wales that owned or rented their accommodation between 1918 and 2011. In 1918, nearly 80% of households rented their homes, while only around 23% owned them.
Over the next four decades, the gap between ownership and renting narrowed steadily. By 1953, the proportion of renting households had fallen to around 69%, while ownership had risen to 31%. This trend continued until 1971, when the two categories reached parity, with 50% of households owning and 50% renting.
From 1971 onwards, the trend reversed. Homeownership began to increase steadily, while renting declined. By 1991, the proportion of owning households had risen to 68%, while renting had fallen to 32%. This trend continued until 2001, when ownership peaked at 69% and renting fell to its all time low of 31%.
The final decade saw a slight uptick in renting, with the proportion rising to 36% in 2011. However, ownership remained dominant, accounting for just shy of 65% of households in that year.
Overall, the chart shows a significant shift from renting to homeownership in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. While renting remains a significant housing tenure, the proportion of owning households has more than doubled over the 93-year period covered by the chart.
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