IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3038 – Band 7.0

Academic IELTS Writing Task 1 - Report

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

IELTS Writing Task 1 report sample 3038 – Band 7.0

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Candidate’s Response:

The bar chart depicts the breakdown in percentages of American people who consumed fast food in restaurants in 2003, 2006, and 2013. Overall, in all the given years the majority of people ate at fast food restaurants once or twice a month, or once a week; however, daily eating in a fast food restaurants had the lowest percentage among the USA residents in all the aforementioned years.

Turning to the bar chart, once or twice a month and once a week eating fast food at a restaurant were by far the most popular eating habit among the USA inhabitants. Once a week eating in fast food restaurants had the highest percentage in 2003 and 2006 at almost 31% and 33% respectively, which decreased to around 28% in 2013. While in 2013, the highest percentage belonged to the people who ate once or twice a month in a fast food restaurant at roughly 33% which was 25% and 30% in 2006 and 2003 accordingly. In contrast, the percentage of people who ate fast food every day and never eating fast food at restaurants accounted for the lowest percentage at less than 5% in all the given years.

With regard to the people who ate fast food several times a week or a few times a year the percentages were below 20%, but more than 10% in all the mentioned years. The proportion of people ate several times a week was the highest at almost 20% in 2006, near 17% in 2003 and the lowest at around 15% in 2013. For those who ate fast food on a yearly basis, 2016 and 2013 stayed at the same level at 15% with almost 2% more than that of 2003.

286 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

March 28, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this report. Task Achievement (TA): The response appropriately summarizes the information given in the bar chart, without any noticeable inaccuracies. Key trends and comparisons are identified, and there is a clear overview provided. Details are supported with data, although there might be minor discrepancies, such as the year "2016" which seems to be a typo and should be "2006".

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The information is organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on different aspects of the data. However, the transitions between the data points could be smoother. Some data points are repeated or the expression is slightly redundant, which affects the coherence.

Lexical Resource (LR): There is a range of vocabulary with a focus on terms relevant to describing trends and frequencies.
Word choice is generally appropriate, although variations in synonyms could be increased to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): A variety of structures are used. Punctuation is generally well-handled. There are minor grammatical errors, and some sentences could be more complex.

To improve the score, consider varying the sentence structures further and ensuring all data points are accurate and correspond to the correct years. Additionally, work on creating smoother transitions between data points to enhance the cohesion of the text.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (Ac)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly and appropriately

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear overview of main trends, differences, or stages

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this report. Task Achievement (TA): The response appropriately summarizes the information given in the bar chart, without any noticeable inaccuracies. Key trends and comparisons are identified, and there is a clear overview provided. Details are supported with data, although there might be minor discrepancies, such as the year "2016" which seems to be a typo and should be "2006".

Coherence and Cohesion (CC): The information is organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on different aspects of the data. However, the transitions between the data points could be smoother. Some data points are repeated or the expression is slightly redundant, which affects the coherence.

Lexical Resource (LR): There is a range of vocabulary with a focus on terms relevant to describing trends and frequencies.
Word choice is generally appropriate, although variations in synonyms could be increased to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): A variety of structures are used. Punctuation is generally well-handled. There are minor grammatical errors, and some sentences could be more complex.

To improve the score, consider varying the sentence structures further and ensuring all data points are accurate and correspond to the correct years. Additionally, work on creating smoother transitions between data points to enhance the cohesion of the text.

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An Above 7.0 Sample

The bar chart compares the frequency at which people in the USA dined in fast food restaurants over a span of ten years, between 2003 and 2013. The data is segmented into six categories based on the frequency of visits.

In 2003, the highest percentage of people, at just over 30%, reported eating fast food once a week, closely followed by those who ate once or twice a month. The least popular categories were those eating fast food every day and those never visiting fast food outlets, both registering under 5%.

By 2006, the once-a-week category had seen a slight decline, whereas the proportion of daily consumers had increased slightly above 5%. Notably, the percentage of those never eating fast food had grown to approximately 10%.

By 2013, the trend showed a decrease in all frequency categories except for 'several times a week', which maintained a steady rate, and 'never', which had a notable increase to almost 15%. The category of daily consumers had diminished by more than half since 2006, indicating a significant decrease in daily fast food consumption.

Overall, the chart reveals a general decline in the frequency of fast food consumption over the decade, with a significant rise in the proportion of individuals completely abstaining from fast food by 2013.

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