IELTS Writing Task 2 Essay sample 3425 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

It is believed that achieving goals in life is generally a matter of fate rather than of sacrifice and effort. Although luck plays a fundamental role in succeeding in purposes, I think it is not the only variable we can rely on. On the contrary, we have to take into account unforeseen events happening when planning to achieve an aim.

First and foremost, I think that nothing is gifted to us. When we want to achieve a goal, we have to make a significant effort and hard work work hard. Since we want to obtain a specific result, we have to strive for it, it won’t simply come to us. For example, a man planned to build his own business one day, and in the end, he succeeded and made it. This was the result of his perseverance, not just a lucky gift. He had probably studied hard, ; he might have saved money to invest in his company, and it may have taken a lot of time to open it. In addition, I believe that we have the power of affecting to affect our results. We have to be positive as long as we are trying try hard to obtain what we want. For instance, if a girl is practicing for an exam and she starts thinking she will fail it, the result is more likely to be negative, because she is setting her mind as she has already failed. Good energy, on the contrary, may influence our results in a positive way.

On the other hand, despite fate being an affecting element while achieving a goal, it covers only a little small percentage of all variables existing. Lots of people believe that our destiny is already written and that we have no control over it. However, this is wrong. We can change our future by believing in ourselves and working hard. If the girl who is preparing for her exam believes that her score has already been decided, she will rely on this belief and she will stop practicing. Furthermore, we cannot rely on luck, as it is unpredictable. For instance, the girl cannot rely on the idea that the exam will be easy and that she will have no difficulty in taking it, because she cannot know how difficult the exam will be, and circumstances may not be as favourable as she expects. This is to say that we cannot prevent the future, and as a consequence, we can trust only ourselves and our own efforts.

To conclude, even if I cannot deny the fact that luck has a relevant influence on our success in goals, I believe that it cannot define our results all by itself. Contrarily, we have the power of setting to set our own achievements by working hard and believing in ourselves.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

February 21, 2025

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this essay. It addresses the prompt effectively, offering a clear position ("luck plays a role, but effort and belief in oneself are more significant"). Examples are included to support arguments (e.g., the businessman building a company, the girl practicing for an exam). The response meets the minimum word requirement.

Several minor errors throughout:
Incorrect prepositions: "succeeding in purposes" → "succeeding in achieving goals."
Verb forms: "it won’t simply come to us" could be more formal as "it will not simply come to us."
Punctuation: Overuse of commas, especially in complex sentences.
Some word choices are awkward or incorrect (e.g., "succeeding in purposes," "relevant influence").
Over-reliance on basic structures and repeated phrases (e.g., "working hard").
Collocations could be improved (e.g., "prevent the future" should be "predict the future"; "good energy" is informal for this context).

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

It is often believed that achieving goals in life depends more on fate than on sacrifice and effort. While luck plays a fundamental role in success, I believe it is not the only factor we should rely on. On the contrary, unforeseen events and circumstances must also be considered when planning to achieve a goal.
First and foremost, success is rarely gifted to us effortlessly. When we aim to accomplish a goal, significant effort and hard work are essential. Since achieving a specific result requires dedication, it does not happen by chance. For example, consider an individual who successfully builds a thriving business. This outcome is typically the result of perseverance, strategic planning, and diligent preparation rather than sheer luck. They may have studied extensively, saved money to invest, and spent years developing their business. Moreover, I believe we have the power to influence our outcomes through our mindset. Maintaining a positive attitude while working towards a goal can significantly impact the result. For instance, if a student preparing for an exam convinces herself that she will fail, she is more likely to perform poorly because of her negative mindset. In contrast, a positive outlook can enhance motivation and contribute to a better outcome.
On the other hand, while luck is undeniably an influencing factor in achieving goals, its role is relatively minor compared to other variables. Some people argue that destiny is predetermined and beyond our control. However, I disagree with this perspective, as I believe we can shape our future through determination and hard work. For instance, if the same student preparing for an exam believes that her score is already decided, she might stop practicing, which would negatively affect her performance. Furthermore, luck is inherently unpredictable and unreliable. Relying on luck alone, such as expecting an exam to be easy, is risky because circumstances may turn out to be far less favorable than anticipated. This demonstrates that we cannot foresee the future, and as a result, we must trust in our efforts and preparations rather than external factors.
To conclude, while I acknowledge that luck has some influence on success, it is not the defining factor. Instead, achieving goals depends primarily on consistent effort, perseverance, and a positive attitude. By focusing on these elements, we can take control of our own achievements and create a brighter future for ourselves.
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