Protected: IELTS Writing Task 2 Essay sample 3422 – Band 6.0

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out.

In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

November 14, 2020

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response

7.0 addresses all parts of the task

7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response

7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

7.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this essay. The writer addresses both parts of the question, discussing the importance of learning English and the value of preserving local languages. They provide relevant examples to support their points, like the student communicating in Berlin using English.
The response could delve deeper into "why" it is important to preserve local languages and offer more specific strategies. The suggestion for practical lessons with classmates is relevant but lacks depth in terms of explaining how this approach could be practically implemented and how it impacts language preservation.

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Nowadays, English is taught in almost every school, often given more importance than local languages. If local languages are neglected, they risk fading away entirely. While I believe that English is a vital subject for developing global communication skills, it is equally important to protect and promote local languages, as they are essential for communication within one’s hometown or country.

English is an important subject to study, as it is commonly taught from elementary school onward. One reason for its significance is that English is widely understood worldwide. This means that even if someone doesn’t know a foreign language, they can communicate using English and still be understood. For example, a student visiting Berlin on holiday might not speak German, but they could use English to communicate effectively with locals, ensuring clear and easy understanding.

However, it is also important to consider that most people primarily use their native language for daily interactions in their own country. Therefore, mastering the local language is equally necessary. For example, an Italian citizen will spend most of their time speaking Italian or local dialects to interact with others, making fluency in these languages essential. To ensure the survival of local languages, schools could enhance their teaching methods by incorporating practical exercises that focus on real-life usage. Hiring more qualified teachers with expertise in these languages would also improve learning quality. Teachers could conduct lessons where students practice speaking with each other in the local language, which would help reinforce their fluency and appreciation for it.

In conclusion, while English is essential for developing communication skills on a global level, it is not more important than local languages, which are crucial for everyday interactions within one’s own community. Practical and interactive lessons could be a solution to ensure the survival of local languages and to maintain their relevance for future generations.

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