IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3409 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.
What are the reasons for this?
Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

In recent years, there has been a growing trend among consumers to purchase locally produced goods rather than imported ones. This shift in consumer behavior can be caused by several factors. However, while this trend offers certain benefits, it also has some drawbacks.

One reason why people prefer local products is the increasing awareness of environmental issues. Imported goods often have a larger carbon footprint due to the transportation involved, whereas locally produced items are considered more eco-friendly. Additionally, buying local supports the regional economy, creating jobs and keeping money within the community, which is particularly beneficial in times of economic uncertainty.

Another factor driving this trend is the desire for fresh and high-quality products. Many consumers believe that local goods, especially food products, are fresher and more nutritious since they do not require long transportation time. This perception of higher quality can be a significant motivator for people to choose local over imported goods.

Despite these aspects, there are also potential negative effects. For one, local products can sometimes be more expensive than imported ones due to smaller production scales and limited resources. This price difference may limit consumer choices, particularly for those with lower incomes. Additionally, the focus on local goods might lead to a narrower variety of products available in the market potentially reducing consumer options.

In conclusion, while the trend of buying locally produced goods is caused by environmental concerns and the desire to support local economies, it may also have negative consequences, such as higher costs and reduced product variety. Overall, this trend is generally non-beneficial.

261 words

Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 24, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this essay. There are no major issues, but the essay could use a few more sophisticated or less common phrases to push it toward a higher score. This essay effectively addresses the task, with good coherence, vocabulary, and grammar. However, to score higher, it would benefit from a more explicit and consistent position on whether the trend is positive or negative, and from slightly more sophisticated language and varied sentence structures.

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In recent years, more consumers have been choosing locally produced goods over imported ones. This shift can be attributed to several factors, and while it has both benefits and drawbacks, I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, making it a positive trend overall.
A primary reason for this preference is growing environmental awareness. Imported goods often have a larger carbon footprint due to transportation, while locally produced items are seen as more eco-friendly. This concern for sustainability encourages consumers to choose local products to reduce their environmental impact.
Supporting the local economy is another significant factor. Buying locally helps create jobs and keeps money within the community, which is especially important during economic downturns. This sense of contributing to the community’s well-being adds an emotional incentive for consumers to choose local products.
Additionally, many consumers perceive locally sourced goods, particularly food, as fresher and of higher quality. The shorter supply chains involved mean these products often retain more of their original freshness and nutritional value, appealing to those who prioritize health and quality.
However, there are potential downsides. Local products can be more expensive due to smaller production scales, making them less accessible to consumers with lower incomes. Furthermore, a focus on local goods might limit the variety of products available, as not all items can be produced locally.
265 words

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