Password Protected
To view this protected post, enter the password below:
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.
To view this protected post, enter the password below:
July 14, 2020
The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.
Feedback:
Thank you for writing this essay.
Task Response (TR):
The candidate addresses the main topic but does not fully answer all parts of the task. The question asks for reasons (plural), but the response primarily focuses on flexibility as the main reason.
The candidate discusses whether this trend is positive or negative, but the development of ideas lacks depth and some aspects are not fully explored.
There is an attempt to provide examples, but they are not sufficiently detailed or relevant.
Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
The essay is organized with clear paragraphing, and ideas are generally connected well.
Some transitional phrases are used effectively, but there are occasional lapses in coherence and clarity due to awkward phrasing and minor errors.
Repetition of similar ideas affects the overall cohesion of the essay.
Lexical Resource (LR):
The candidate uses a range of vocabulary adequately but with some errors ("siginifant" for "significant", "becasue" for "because", "traffict" for "traffic").
There are some attempts to use less common lexical items, but these are not always used accurately or appropriately.
Frequent spelling mistakes and minor lexical errors reduce the overall effectiveness of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
The candidate uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures but makes frequent grammatical errors.
Errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word order are present and sometimes impede understanding ("avoiding wasting finances", "overal fitness level").
Issues with punctuation and article usage are also evident.
Overall:
The essay addresses the task but does not fully answer all parts, particularly the requirement to provide multiple reasons.
The response is organized logically but is marred by frequent errors in grammar, spelling, and lexical choice.
To improve, the candidate should focus on reducing errors in grammar and spelling, enhancing vocabulary usage, and providing more detailed and developed ideas in their response.
Co-founder and CFO
British Council certified English teacher, IDP-trained IELTS instructor, content writer, editor-in-chief, co-founder, and Chief Financial Officer (CFO) at IELTS Juice Online Academy.
The development of computers is a global phenomenon.
What are the main advantages and disadvantages?
It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?