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Write about the following topic:
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
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July 11, 2020
The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.
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Task Response (TR):
Strengths: The essay addresses all parts of the task, providing reasons why cash might be phased out and why some people might resist this change. Relevant examples are included to support the points made.
Weaknesses: Some arguments could be more developed, and there is a slight lack of clarity in expressing certain points. The essay could benefit from a stronger conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
Strengths: The essay is organized with clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. Transitional phrases are used to connect ideas.
Weaknesses: Some transitions are awkward, and the essay occasionally lacks fluidity. Better use of linking words and clearer connections between sentences could improve cohesion.
Lexical Resource (LR):
Strengths: The vocabulary range is adequate, and some attempts are made to use less common lexical items.
Weaknesses: There are several spelling mistakes and incorrect word choices ("deminished" instead of "diminished", "fade away" instead of "fade", "transfered" instead of "transferred", "suspecious" instead of "suspicious", "allocated" instead of "allocate", "vulnearability" instead of "vulnerability", "against" instead of "against", "confidentially" instead of "confidentiality"). Repetition of certain words and phrases could be reduced.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
Strengths: The essay demonstrates a variety of sentence structures, including complex sentences. Some grammar points are handled correctly.
Weaknesses: Frequent grammatical errors detract from the overall quality ("easily prosecute the suspecious cases", "for a cash", "leading to saving resources", "method is that they want less control"). Better attention to subject-verb agreement, article usage, and punctuation is needed.
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