IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3360 – Band 7.0

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

Residing in a nation where one can not speak the language can potentially lead to social and practical issues. I completely agree with this statement, as having a language barrier can result in miscommunication, and performing regular tasks might become problematic.

Living in a foreign nation where a language barrier exists can cause communication issues; this is especially true when inhabitants of said countries only speak their mother tongue. Not having a common way of communication with the residents of one’s new place of residence can make simple interactions, like getting to know neighbours or making friends, seem impossible. Let’s take Georgia, for instance, most of its inhabitants only fluent in russian and georgian with a minority speaking english fluently; this might make international students feel like outcasts when trying to communicate with their landlord or trying to get acquainted with their peers.

Moreover, a lot of practical hardships might stem from the lack of understanding the language; attempting to open a bank account or asking for booking an appointmnet with a doctor might be arduous. An expert command of the language is required in official settings, hence, difficulty in communicating in such situations. For instance, to open a bank account in Georgia, one will take way more time than if a Soviet Union resident or a georgian wants to do the exact same thing. Additionally, visits to the emergency department are daunting, especially when one is in dire need of medical attention and there are no staff or certified translators on site.

In conclusion, Living in a foreign nation comes with its challenges, primarily in attempting to communicate; having a language barrier proved to cause social hardships in basic human communication, and can potentially make official deeds more difficult than required

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Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 28, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
9.0 fully addresses all parts of the task
9.0 presents a fully developed position in answer to the question
9.0 with relevant, fully extended, and well-supported ideas
9.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The response follows the rubric’s pattern and takes full advantage of its elements. Coherence and cohesion is almost always correct; some sentence transitions need better control or better punctuation. Vocabulary could use a wide range for this task; more words like “daunting” or “deeds” are needed. The grammar might be a cause for concern as there are some punctuation errors. Although they do not impede communication, the example in the second body paragraph has a weird transition. In short, this is indeed an excellent essay.

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Residing in a country where one does not speak the local language can undoubtedly lead to significant social and practical challenges. I fully agree with this statement, as language barriers often result in miscommunication, making everyday tasks difficult and hindering the ability to form meaningful social connections.
One of the most pressing issues when living in a foreign country is the challenge of communication, especially when the majority of the population speaks only their native language. Without a shared language, even basic interactions, such as getting to know neighbors or making friends, become daunting tasks. For example, in Georgia, where most people are fluent only in Georgian and Russian, international students who do not speak these languages often feel isolated. This language barrier can prevent them from integrating into the community or even conducting simple conversations with their landlords or peers.
In addition to social difficulties, the inability to communicate effectively can lead to numerous practical problems. Essential tasks like opening a bank account or scheduling a doctor's appointment can become overwhelming if one does not possess a good command of the local language. Official procedures often require precise understanding and communication, and without it, these tasks can take much longer than they would for a native speaker. For instance, opening a bank account in Georgia might be a straightforward process for a local, but for someone unfamiliar with the language, it could take significantly more time and effort. Furthermore, seeking medical attention in emergencies can be particularly stressful when there are no translators available, potentially delaying critical care.
In conclusion, living in a foreign country presents many challenges, particularly in terms of communication. Language barriers not only create social difficulties but also complicate everyday practical tasks, making life in a new country more challenging than necessary.
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