IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3357 – Band 7.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.
Why is this the case?
Do you think that this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

It is common for business owners to promote their products in a way to make them seem revolutionary. I believe this is primarily because the current market is extremely competitive, and this is an unfavourable marketing strategy as most of the items are not actually what they originally were promoted to be.

The competition in the business sector is fierce, and wanting an edge over the competitors is understandable. Most entrepreneurs strive to win over potential buyers to pick them over their adversaries. In other words, they would do anything to persuade their target audience that they have a superior product and that choosing them is more cost-effective. For instance, the way Apple promotes its new iPhones every year is remarkable, and how it always attempts to include a new feature that is not found in its biggest opponent, Samsung; in this way, they are a step ahead, and this might be enough to convince potential customers to buy their mobiles.

Although marketing new merchandise as being ground-breaking is considered good to excel over contenders, it is not the best idea to lie and deceive individuals; most of the new products are a scam, and marketers use “trendy” words to attract new customers. Unfortunately, it is quite common to market an item as being “life-changing” even though it is not, and the geriatric population is frequently falling prey to such scams.

this is mainly because there are no regulations regarding fair marketing. For example, pharmaceutical companies promote their new vitamin bottles as ‘anti-aging’ or as diet replacements, none of which is FDA-approved or packed up by scientific studies or clinical trials.

In conclusion, it is acceptable for businessmen to promote their items as radical, honesty should not be omitted. It is understandable that they need to somehow captivate the target audience, misleading and lying to purchasers is unacceptable practice.

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Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

September 4, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
9.0 fully addresses all parts of the task
9.0 presents a fully developed position in answer to the question
9.0 with relevant, fully extended, and well-supported ideas
9.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
6.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
9.0 with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features
8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
8.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
7.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Vocabulary-rich, to-the-point, and clear essay! The only areas that need immediate attention are the missing “but” in the conclusion and the third body paragraph, which does not clearly explain why it is a separate entity.

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

Advertising is a crucial tool for businesses to attract consumers and stay competitive. One prominent trend in modern marketing is the emphasis on the novelty of products. This essay will explore the reasons behind this approach and discuss its implications.
The primary reason businesses focus on advertising the newness of their products is to generate a consumer perception of improvement and innovation. In a market saturated with similar products, highlighting an item as “new” suggests that it is an upgrade from previous versions or is superior to competitors’ offerings. This strategy taps into the psychological inclination towards novelty, which can stimulate the release of dopamine, a neurotransmitter associated with reward and pleasure.
Moreover, the technological landscape is evolving at an unprecedented rate, leading to shorter product life cycles. Consumers have come to expect continual advancements, and companies use advertising to meet these expectations, signaling that they are at the forefront of progress.
However, whether this trend is positive or negative is subject to debate. On the one hand, the emphasis on newness can drive innovation as companies strive to offer genuinely improved products. It can also promote economic activity and job creation, fueling the overall growth of society.
On the other hand, it can lead to unnecessary consumerism. People may purchase new products not because they need them, but because they are persuaded by advertising that the newness is synonymous with must-have improvement. This can result in wasteful spending and contribute to environmental degradation, as products are discarded before their useful life has truly ended.
In conclusion, while emphasizing the newness of products in advertising may be rooted in the competitive nature of business and consumer psychology, its impact on society is mixed. It can foster innovation and economic growth but may also promote unsustainable consumer behavior. It is the responsibility of both businesses and consumers to balance the quest for the new with consideration for genuine value and environmental sustainability.
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