IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3326 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place.
what is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

Nowadays, some people believe that keeping your household and your workplace are significant important. they emphasize that everything should be organized. I agree with this view because of several reasons which I will Express here.

firstly, This habit can have positive positive effect over the person’s behavior. when a person endeavor  to keep everything in the right place, especially at home or at workplace, he or she will compel himself or herself to follow a specific behavior.

this would be emerged by putting a book at its place, among other things. it can create a sense of being more disciplined in that person’s behavior which can lead he  or she to be in more organized and tidier in other places.

for example, in the restaurants and   the coffee shop in which individuals could keep them tidy.

what’s more, this life is time can convert people to focused  and problem solver persons. if individuals oblige  themselves Do I stick to a rule in which they are putting everything at the right position, they will boost their attention towards every part of their surroundings. such an attention could be useful when people would have to concentrate on a problem. for example, is scientific report shown that in a mask class had a student focused on a problem, they could have solved it very quickly. this is speeding solving a problem is rooted in individual’s life Style  in which they have been organized and tidy.

In conclusion, I hold the view that  keeping the resident and workplace shipshape would be of paramount importance to people. this is because of having advantages like being more disciplined and focused towards different issues in life.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

August 11, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
6.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. There are only isolated errors. For instance, “household” has a different meaning than “house.” In another place, “in which” is not used in a correct context even though the grammar’s execution is correct. On the plus side, the ranges of vocabulary and grammar are varied.

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The topic of maintaining a well-organized home and workplace has sparked debates about the significance of tidiness. In my opinion, the practice of keeping both environments orderly plays a crucial role in promoting productivity, mental well-being, and a balanced lifestyle.
Firstly, a tidy home and workplace can greatly enhance one's efficiency and productivity. A clutter-free environment minimizes distractions and enables individuals to focus on tasks at hand. When belongings are organized and readily accessible, less time is wasted on searching for items, leading to increased work output and reduced stress levels. Additionally, a clean and organized workspace can stimulate creativity and innovation, fostering a conducive atmosphere for brainstorming and problem-solving.
Moreover, maintaining orderliness can positively impact mental well-being. A cluttered and disorganized environment can evoke feelings of unease and overwhelm. On the other hand, an organized space promotes a sense of calm and control, contributing to improved mental clarity and reduced anxiety. Coming home to an organized living space can also create a sanctuary for relaxation and rejuvenation after a hectic day.
Furthermore, balancing tidiness at both home and work is essential for a holistic lifestyle. A disorganized living space can spill over into professional life, affecting focus and motivation. Conversely, work-related stress and chaos can disturb one's personal life and relationships. Striking a harmonious balance ensures that individuals can maintain a healthy equilibrium between their professional and personal spheres.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that maintaining a well-organized home and workplace is pivotal for productivity, mental well-being, and a balanced lifestyle. Tidiness fosters efficiency, reduces stress, and contributes to a holistic sense of well-being. Therefore, cultivating the habit of keeping both environments organized is not only important but also beneficial for individuals in their daily lives.
280 words

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