IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3319 – Band 7.0

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

These days some people believe that we can watch movies on electronic devices without any need to go to the cinema whereas others claim that in order to be completely satisfied , people should observe the film in a cinema. I will outline these two viewpoints in this essay.

On the one hand, those who believe that there is any urge for seeing the film in a cinema, have financial view. They can save money by observing films on the phone or other electronic gadgets. As the ticket for seeing the movie in a cinema would be expensive, it won’t be economical to be purchased by fellow citizens. This cost can be accumulated to other expenses, such as fuel so as to fill up the car’s tank for getting the cinema. This leads the situation in terms of finance to get worse, and the desire for saving money would be of paramount importance to viewers.

On the other hand, individuals who are in favor of watching the film in a cinema have two reasons. Firstly, if they want to be fully satisfied with seeing the movie, they should observe it on a big screen in a cinema. This can give the observer a sense of excitement which won’t be achievable by seeing the film on a small platform. People can make sense in different way, when they watch actors or actresses who have been shown in a big size. This is because their face and styles are more noticeable which would excite a strange feeling in viewers. In addition, the ambiance of the cinema contributes to the people to enjoy from seeing the film in a collective environment like the cinema. Laughing and crying as well as shouting play a pivotal role in creating this pleasure.

In conclusion, I believe that seeing the movie in the cinema would be more enjoyable because of the existence of a huge screen in that place as well as the ambience of the cinema is a main contributer to this feeling. This is provided that if that place would be of sufficient standards, in terms of sound and lighting.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

October 13, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. This is a very good IELTS response which deserves 7.0 in total. To improve this score, while the number of errors remains low, more advanced grammatical structures can be used in a couple of places.

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The advent of technology has revolutionized how we access and watch movies, giving rise to a debate about the necessity of traditional cinemas. While some argue that smartphones and tablets have made cinema outings redundant, others insist that the full enjoyment of films can only be realized in a theater. This essay will examine both perspectives and offer a personal viewpoint.
Supporters of mobile viewing assert that the convenience and accessibility of smartphones and tablets have rendered cinemas obsolete. With the ability to stream movies on handheld devices, audiences can watch films whenever and wherever they choose, eliminating the need to travel to a cinema. This flexibility fits the fast-paced lifestyles of today and offers a personalized viewing experience.
On the other hand, advocates for the cinema experience emphasize the irreplaceable magic of the big screen. The cinema offers a unique atmosphere with its immersive visuals and surround sound systems. The collective experience of watching a film in a dark theater with a captivated audience enhances emotional engagement and adds a social dimension to movie-going. Additionally, the sheer scale of blockbuster films is best appreciated in a theater.
In my opinion, both viewpoints have validity, but the importance of cinemas remains significant. While mobile viewing offers convenience, the cinematic experience offers an unparalleled immersion and emotional impact. Watching a film in a theater creates a sense of awe and connection with the story and the audience that is hard to replicate on a small screen. Moreover, cinemas contribute to the communal and cultural aspects of entertainment, making them an essential part of the film industry.
In conclusion, the debate between mobile viewing and traditional cinemas revolves around convenience versus immersive experience. While technology has expanded our options, the cinematic experience continues to offer a unique and valuable way to enjoy films, ensuring the enduring relevance of theaters in the digital age.
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