IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3313 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. 
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

In different countries around the world, there are two types of schools, one where male and female students are mixed and those which are uni-sex. There are two opposite views regarding the benefits of each of these typed of schools. I personally believe that schools registering both genders are more adantagous.

Considering educating pupils together two main benefits can be mentioned. The first and foremost upside is that students in a mixed gender schhool have an opportunity to educate themselves about the other gender’s characteristics. This is , in turn can help them to build successful relationships in the future. Another positive point with this educational system is that it stimulate an environment for students which is very similar to what they will encounter at their work place in their adulthood. This can definitely help both girls and boys to have more successful job experience. These two points are very strong supports showing how mixed education can positively affect student’s life in the future.

On the other hand, there are people who support the idea of separating boys and girls at schools. One of the positive aspects at this approach is that such schools can better educated their students by focusing on  their unique needs and talents in terms of their gender. In addition, when boys and girls, are separated, their level of distraction will obviously decrease during their learning sessions. This point has been actually concluded by a survey conducted in 2010 by ministry of education among teenagers with an age range of 13 to 17. Given the above reasons, one may argue that separated schools are more affective to reach theirs educational role.

In conclusion, both of these educational systems have their own benefits. However, I believe that education in a mix environment is by far more beneficial than education in a schools where  pupils of different sex are seperated.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

October 11, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
7.0 addresses all parts of the task
7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. There are a few spelling errors, but one error is repetitive, making it even more damaging to the lexical score. In addition, the conclusion, which holds the writer’s own opinion, could be improved: first, the opinion is only stated as a separate entity without clear connections to the favorable school of thought.

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The debate over whether it is preferable to educate boys and girls in separate schools or in mixed-gender schools has been ongoing for years. Proponents of single-sex education argue that it offers distinct advantages, while advocates for mixed schools emphasize their benefits. This essay will explore both sides of the argument and present a personal perspective.
Supporters of single-sex education contend that it provides an environment that eliminates gender distractions, allowing students to concentrate better on their studies. According to this view, it reduces stereotypes and promotes gender equality by preventing any potential bias in teaching. In single-sex schools, educators can tailor their teaching methods to suit the specific learning styles and needs of boys and girls, potentially improving academic outcomes.
Conversely, proponents of mixed-gender schools argue that they reflect the real world more accurately and encourage social interaction and mutual understanding between genders from an early age. They believe that co-education helps in developing social skills, reducing gender-based prejudice, and preparing students for future workplaces where they will collaborate with people of all genders.
In my opinion, both approaches have their merits, but the benefits of co-education outweigh those of single-sex education. Mixed schools expose students to a diverse range of perspectives and promote tolerance and respect for differences. It prepares them better for life beyond the classroom, where they will need to interact and cooperate with individuals of all genders. While single-sex schools may offer certain advantages in tailored teaching, they risk limiting students' exposure to diverse viewpoints and experiences.
In conclusion, the debate between single-sex and co-educational schools will continue, with valid points on both sides. However, I believe that mixed-gender schools provide a more holistic educational experience, preparing students not only academically but also socially for the challenges they will encounter in the real world.
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