IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3295 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country rather than other countries’.
Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

Many think the local literature such as fiction and poetry must be valued over those of other nations. I do agree with this view for two primary reason as follows.

Firstly, studying the local literature deepen the understanding of one’s own country particularly for children at a young age in school. For instance, in Iran introducing masterpieses like Shahname, Manteghoteir, or Golestan to adolescents will give them a reliable source of information so that they can be aware of their rich culture and history such that makes a sense of belonging and unity to them. Furthermore, having access to a huge and various source of literature from all over the world plus social media, movies, and series, in our contemporary world are fading diversity and leading to a homogeneousness world. Teaching local literature to the younger generation, therefore, demands further consideration.

Secondly, knowing and reading more of regional literature can boost individuals’ personal and collective identity specially the youth, hence the importance of teaching district literature at schools. To exemplify, reading works of authors such as Jamalzadeh, Farrokhzad, or Hedayat helps Iranian juveniles to form their identity based on Persian culture since they explain Iranian customs, taboos, or beliefs in their books in the form of stories and poems.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that schools must concentrate more on their own countries literature rather than those far away countries for the sake of a nation’s collective identity and enhancing it individuals’ sense of belonging.

250 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 10, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
5.0 that may cause some difficulty for the reader
5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
7.0 they do not impede communication
7.0
6.5

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The debate over whether children should primarily be exposed to the literature of their own country, rather than that of other nations, is a topic that invites diverse viewpoints. In my view, I disagree with the notion that one's national literature should be prioritized over international literary works. A balanced approach that includes a variety of literary traditions can offer a richer educational experience for children.
Firstly, exposing children to a diverse range of literary traditions can broaden their horizons and foster a global perspective. Literature is not solely a reflection of a nation's culture but also a gateway to understanding different societies and worldviews. Encountering literature from various countries enables children to appreciate the universality of human experiences and the richness of cultural diversity.
Moreover, literature from other countries often provides unique insights and alternative narratives that can enrich a child's education. It offers fresh perspectives and imaginative worlds that may not be found in their own country's literature. This can stimulate creativity, critical thinking, and empathy, which are essential skills for personal and intellectual growth.
Furthermore, in an increasingly interconnected world, it is essential for children to be well-versed in the literary heritage of different nations. This can enhance their cross-cultural communication skills and make them more adaptable in a globalized society.
In conclusion, while it is important for children to be familiar with the literature of their own country, I believe it is equally vital to expose them to literature from other nations. A diverse literary education offers a more comprehensive and enriching experience, fostering open-mindedness, cultural awareness, and a global perspective that is indispensable in our modern world.
272 words

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