IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3289 – Band 5.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

It is argued by some that solving environmental problems is a global cooperation, while there are others who believe that these are international problems. Whereas, the way to facing these problems can be tackled by national standards because some issues are more serious in some countries compared to other, I believe that addressing these issues should be considered as a global matter because of the global interaction will happen all over the world in the future according to the issues.

On one hand, environmental issues should be resolved nationally, according to some.

This is mainly because every country’s environmental problems would be different from another country and the government prefer to tackle with serious one’s first. This strategy leads to saving national budget in the right direction. Thus the government will be able to manage other issues with the rest of the budget.

On the other hand, many, myself included, think that these problems are global issues. Because the interactions and connections between environmental problems is obvious and in the near future we will have to change our plans according the major problems will occur. For example melting glacier in Antarctic will lead to rising the sea level all over the world eventually.

In conclusion, although it is thought by some that tackling with environmental issues should be considered as a national problem, I believe that these problems are global concerns and all governments should take measures to address the issues.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

February 25, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Underlength is a major error at IELTS. The writing response must be more than 250 words. Paragraphing must be completely clear; any extra, unnecessary space can damage our coherence and cohesion scores. The essay needs immediate attention to its structure, word-count, and making sure “all” ideas are developed fully and properly. Vocabulary and Grammar come second. Here’s a repetitive error that we can stop in future:


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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
7.0 addresses all parts of the task
7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response
5.0 presents some main ideas but these are limited and not sufficiently developed; there may be irrelevant detail
5.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically
6.0
Lexical Resource
6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
5.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Underlength is a major error at IELTS. The writing response must be more than 250 words. Paragraphing must be completely clear; any extra, unnecessary space can damage our coherence and cohesion scores. The essay needs immediate attention to its structure, word-count, and making sure “all” ideas are developed fully and properly. Vocabulary and Grammar come second. Here’s a repetitive error that we can stop in future:

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An Above 7.0 Sample

The question of whether to address environmental problems on a global or national scale has sparked a longstanding debate. While some advocate for global solutions, others argue that dealing with such issues at the national level is more practical. In my view, a combination of both approaches is necessary.
Supporters of global-scale environmental solutions argue that many environmental challenges, such as climate change, air pollution, and biodiversity loss, are inherently global in nature. These issues transcend national boundaries and require coordinated efforts from all countries to effectively combat them. Global cooperation is seen as essential to establish common regulations, reduce greenhouse gas emissions, and protect shared ecosystems.
Conversely, proponents of national-scale solutions contend that environmental problems often have local variations and immediate impacts. They argue that addressing issues at the national level allows for tailored solutions that align with a country's specific circumstances and priorities. This approach may lead to more practical and immediate actions to safeguard the environment.
In my opinion, striking a balance between global and national approaches is crucial. Some environmental problems necessitate global cooperation due to their interconnectedness, but localized solutions can be equally effective in addressing region-specific issues. An integrated strategy, where nations collaborate on global challenges and implement tailored measures for local concerns, offers the most comprehensive approach.
Ultimately, environmental problems are too diverse and complex to be resolved solely through a single approach. Global and national strategies can complement each other, providing a more effective and nuanced response to the environmental challenges we face. The key lies in fostering international collaboration while allowing nations the flexibility to address their unique environmental concerns.
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