IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3271 – Band 7.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too invaluable to be shared freely.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Economy and Business, Science and Research, Task 2 essay, Writing samples

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Candidate’s Response:

There is now an argument as to whether knowledge in science and business should be accessible to all people or charged for some notable and groundbreaking results. I personally believe that every piece of information that can have a life-changing effect should be shared immediately, no matter how important or valuable it is.

Proponents of knowledge share say that with the imminent positive effect of some scientific discoveries or economic theories, it would be far immoral to hamper the pass of information to people in need. A prime example of this is medical breakthroughs such as vaccine developments that are in close connection with humans lives and can save millions of people. Providing that richer developed countries become willing to transfer their experience and knowledge to less developed countries, not only positive strides in establishing an equally benefited world is made, but also thousands of hundreds of individuals can be saved from deadly diseases such as the COVID-19 virus.

On the other side of the argument, a group of people believes that not every type of information should be provided chargeless to everyone. Some scientific results were yielded at a significant cost with someone’s ingenuity involved. Consequently, companies and genius people behind such discoveries have the right to ask for money for their efforts. Furthermore, without sufficient financial support in place, researchers will soon become demotivated to work, and there will be severe ramifications for the science and knowledge generation cycle.

To sum up, as much as people in science and economy are deserving receiving support in the form of funds and product selling, but in some areas that life of peoples is in danger, there should be no limitation in exchange of research.

284 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 15, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response

9.0 fully addresses all parts of the task

9.0 presents a fully developed position in answer to the question

8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately

7.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation

8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation

9.0 the communication is completely natural

8.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

9.0 uses a wide range of structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

7.0 they do not impede communication

7.0

7.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The advanced grammatical structures used need more accuracy and practice.

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

In the realms of scientific research, business, and academia, the extent to which information should be shared remains a subject of debate. On one hand, there are proponents who argue for maximum transparency, contending that widespread information sharing fosters progress and innovation. On the other hand, there are those who believe that certain information is too critical or invaluable to be openly disseminated, as it may lead to adverse consequences. I align with the latter view, recognizing the importance of protecting sensitive information in certain contexts.

Advocates of unrestricted information sharing assert that openness is the cornerstone of progress. In scientific research, sharing data and findings accelerates the pace of discovery and allows for the validation of results. Similarly, in business and academia, sharing information can enhance collaboration and foster innovation, benefiting society as a whole.

Conversely, the opposing view maintains that some information is too invaluable to be disclosed openly. In scientific research, sensitive data, such as confidential patient information or classified research related to national security, should be safeguarded to prevent potential harm. In the business world, proprietary technologies and trade secrets must be protected to ensure a competitive edge and economic sustainability. Moreover, in academia, certain knowledge may be kept confidential to avoid misuse or ethical dilemmas.

I share the perspective that some information should not be shared openly, as there are cases where the potential consequences outweigh the benefits of transparency. While openness is crucial for progress, it must be balanced with the need to protect invaluable or sensitive data in contexts where adverse outcomes can be foreseen.

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