IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3213 – Band 7.0

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

 It is true that artificial intelligence is a key area in today’s modern world with its specific pros and cons. While I accept its potential risks, I believe that benefits of artificial intelligence outweigh its drawbacks.

When it comes to discuss the negative consequences of artificial intelligence, some people tend to see the empty half of the glass, imagining a world that is run by super-smart machines. This group of people believes that with the current pace of artificial intelligence development, computers would shortly become smarter than humans, and this could lead to a world in which computers govern humans. Considering the latest artificial intelligence achievements, I believe that we are far from the invention of computers that are smarter than humans. Therefore, we have the time and chance to properly regulate artificial intelligence in order to reduce the unwanted adverse implications of this scientific field. Furthermore, establishing a tough international supervisory organisation can be a truly effective action in fighting against any probable abuse of artificial intelligence.

It is undeniable that smart machines, computers and devices have already had countless beneficial effects on our lives. Smart cars, for example, not only have caused a remarkable decrease in road crash rate, but also have made navigation much easier and more convenient than before. Today, many modern cars benefit from automatic braking systems that utilize complicated artificial intelligence calculation methods to avoid car crashes. In addition, with new intelligent navigational systems finding a destination is not a challenge anymore, and so we can easily travel to even remote places without worrying about getting lost. Positive impacts of artificial intelligence on other fields, from medical diagnosis to industrial developments, are also huge and evident.

In conclusion, I view artificial intelligence as an empowerment tool that its adverse implications can simply be avoided.

300 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 17, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 7.0 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
7.0 presents, extends, and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
7.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
9.0 communication is completely natural
7.0
7.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. The first paragraph, about the adverse effects of AI, is too generic, whereas the second paragraph, the ones about benefits of AI, is too specific hovering over autonomous cars.

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The rapid advancements in the field of artificial intelligence (AI) have ignited a debate about their potential impact on our lives. While some are optimistic about the positive transformations AI can bring, others express concerns about the consequences of a world where machines surpass human intelligence. This essay will explore both perspectives and offer my own viewpoint.
On one hand, proponents of AI development argue that it holds immense promise for improving various aspects of human existence. AI can revolutionize healthcare by diagnosing diseases more accurately and predicting outbreaks. In education, it can personalize learning experiences, catering to individual needs. Moreover, AI-driven automation can enhance efficiency in industries, leading to economic growth and job creation.
Conversely, skeptics worry about the implications of AI surpassing human capabilities. The prospect of machines making autonomous decisions in critical areas like autonomous weapons or medical diagnosis is unsettling. Concerns also arise regarding job displacement, as automation may render some human roles obsolete. Additionally, ethical dilemmas emerge, such as issues related to privacy, bias in AI algorithms, and the potential for AI to be misused.
In my opinion, AI's impact will largely depend on how we harness and regulate its potential. While AI can undoubtedly bring benefits, we must prioritize ethical considerations, ensure transparency, and establish robust regulations. Education and upskilling initiatives should be in place to prepare the workforce for AI-driven changes in the job market.
In conclusion, developments in AI offer both promise and concern. AI has the potential to enhance our lives significantly, but it also raises ethical, societal, and economic challenges. To ensure a positive future with AI, we must proactively address these issues through responsible development and regulation.
278 words

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