IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3202 – Band 6.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Capital punishment should be a part of country law.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

In many countries, capital punishment is still a part of judicial system as their governments believe that it is a practical and useful preventive measure which should be used. In my personal opinion, it is a cruel and unfair penalty which should be eliminated from law in every corner of the world.

Capital punishment increases the level of cruelty within a society. When people are sentenced to death by the government, it gives the perseption that killing people is justified, if only it is for a good reason. This fact could create a society in which people might act violent in stressful situations and harm others, because in their subconscious harming others is not a big deal. For instance, in Saudi Arabia, criminals who are sentenced to death are executed in front of the public and everyone can watch someone’s life perishing easily.

Moreover, it isn’t just to take away one’s life according to what we believe has happened. A criminal is judged by the evidences which are gathered by police; evidences which could be misleading sometimes. We never can be certain enough in order to decide to end another person’s life, regardless of what he or she has done. In 1991, in the US, a man named John McArthour was charged with murder and at the end the verdict was capital punishment. The verdict was executed and 4 years after that the real killer turned himself in, and it was clear that John was innocent. This is a sad story showing us how wrong we can be in our judgment.

In conclusion, I believe capital punishment is not the right penalty, and not only it has a negative effect on society, but also it is not a fair sentence. We should eradicate it from law or we will end up having a more aggressive society, and more innocent people will lose their lives because of our misjudgment.

316 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 9, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

Disclaimer

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
8.0 sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
8.0 presents a well-developed response to the question
8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
6.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
6.5

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The 6.5 sample upgraded to 7.0+

The issue of capital punishment has long been a contentious one in the realm of legal and moral debates. Some argue that it should remain a part of a country's law, while others vehemently oppose it. This essay will explore the arguments on both sides and ultimately present a case for the abolition of capital punishment.
One argument in favor of retaining capital punishment is that it serves as a deterrent to heinous crimes. Supporters contend that the fear of facing the ultimate punishment may discourage potential offenders from committing acts such as murder. They believe that the existence of the death penalty sends a strong message about the seriousness of these crimes and is a necessary tool for maintaining social order.
However, the use of capital punishment raises several ethical and practical concerns. First and foremost, the risk of executing an innocent person cannot be ignored. The potential for human error in legal proceedings, including wrongful convictions, has been well-documented. In an imperfect justice system, the death penalty becomes an irreversible and fatal mistake. Additionally, there is an ongoing global trend towards the abolition of capital punishment, reflecting a growing international consensus against it.
Moreover, the death penalty is often disproportionately applied to marginalized and minority groups, raising issues of racial and socio-economic discrimination. These inequalities within the criminal justice system call into question the fairness and impartiality of capital punishment.
In conclusion, while proponents of capital punishment argue that it serves as a deterrent, the risk of executing innocent individuals, ethical concerns, and issues of discrimination highlight the need to reconsider its place in a country's legal system. The trend towards its abolition worldwide suggests that society should prioritize alternative means of achieving justice and deterring crime while upholding fundamental human rights and ethical principles.
299 words

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