IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3162 – Band 7.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Genetic modification is one of the most controversial issues today. While its supporters count it as an empowerment tool to increase the quality of human life, its oppositions see the empty half of the glass, worrying about its foreseeable implications, not only on human life but also on other forms of life on earth.

Even the most bigoted opposition of genetic engineering cannot deny its huge achievements. For example, scientists have succeeded to raise productivity of agricultural products such as grains, beans, etc. through modification of their genome, and this has led to remarkable reduction in global hunger, and has consequently reduced the number of people starving on a daily basis across the world. Furthermore, once incurable disease like blood cancer has become treatable to some extent, utilizing in-vitro growth of stem cells, which is one of the latest achievements of genetic engineering.

Beside countless undeniable positive effects of genetic engineering on human life, its adverse effects on the environment should not be overlooked. For instance, one of the most disastrous incidents in genetic engineering history happened when a colony of genetically modified bees escaped from a laboratory in Chile in 1987. Due to as yet unknown factor, the bees that were under test -in order to create a more resistant type against disease- had turned to extremely violent flying monsters which nothing was protected against their attacks. Later, these small predators caused the extinction of several different animal species, and this way contributed in the nation-wide draught and famine that struck the country in 1992.

In conclusion, I personally view genetic engineering as a game changer which can even be a door to a utopia where there is no incurable disease; however, the stronger a weapon is the deadlier backfire it can cause. Therefore, we need to be extra cautious and strictly regulate genetic modification, so that minimize unintentional negative effects of it. Furthermore, a tough integrated international supervision system seems to be vital in order to make the abuse of genetic modification almost impossible.

336 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

February 22, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Task Response (TR): You've effectively and fully addressed all parts of the task, discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clear opinion. The examples of agricultural productivity and medical advancements illustrate the positive side, while the case of genetically modified bees highlights potential dangers, demonstrating a deep understanding of the subject.

Coherence and cohesion (CC): Your essay is well-organized, with clear progression of ideas. However, the transition between the positive and negative aspects of genetic engineering could be smoother. Using more varied cohesive devices and clearer topic sentences could enhance the essay's overall coherence.

Lexical Resource (LR): You've demonstrated a wide range of vocabulary with terms like "empowerment tool," "foreseeable implications," and "in-vitro growth of stem cells." To further improve, ensure precision in word choice, as some phrases ("empty half of the glass") might be seen as slightly inaccurately used idioms (i.e. the glass is half empty)

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Your essay showcases a variety of complex sentence structures and is generally accurate. However, there are minor errors and awkward constructions that could be refined.


Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
9.0 fully addresses all parts of the task
9.0 presents a fully developed position in answer to the question
9.0 with relevant, fully extended, and well-supported ideas
9.0
Coherence and Cohesion
7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well
7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
8.0 uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately
7.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
8.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
9.0 communication is completely natural
7.0
7.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Task Response (TR): You've effectively and fully addressed all parts of the task, discussing both views comprehensively and providing a clear opinion. The examples of agricultural productivity and medical advancements illustrate the positive side, while the case of genetically modified bees highlights potential dangers, demonstrating a deep understanding of the subject.

Coherence and cohesion (CC): Your essay is well-organized, with clear progression of ideas. However, the transition between the positive and negative aspects of genetic engineering could be smoother. Using more varied cohesive devices and clearer topic sentences could enhance the essay's overall coherence.

Lexical Resource (LR): You've demonstrated a wide range of vocabulary with terms like "empowerment tool," "foreseeable implications," and "in-vitro growth of stem cells." To further improve, ensure precision in word choice, as some phrases ("empty half of the glass") might be seen as slightly inaccurately used idioms (i.e. the glass is half empty)

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): Your essay showcases a variety of complex sentence structures and is generally accurate. However, there are minor errors and awkward constructions that could be refined.

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An Above 7.0 Sample

Genetic engineering has emerged as a pivotal issue in contemporary society, generating divergent perspectives regarding its potential impact. Some individuals anticipate that genetic engineering will usher in significant improvements, positively transforming various facets of human existence. Proponents argue that it holds the promise of enhancing medical treatments, eradicating hereditary diseases, and boosting agricultural yields through genetically modified crops. They envision a future where genetic engineering contributes to a healthier, more resilient population.
Conversely, there are those who perceive genetic engineering as a potential threat to life on Earth. Skeptics voice concerns about unforeseen consequences, ethical dilemmas, and the potential for irreversible environmental damage. The fear is that manipulating the genetic makeup of organisms may lead to unintended and harmful outcomes, disrupting ecosystems and introducing risks that are difficult to anticipate.
In my opinion, the outlook on genetic engineering should be one of cautious optimism. While recognizing its potential to bring about positive transformations, it is imperative to approach this field with ethical considerations and regulatory frameworks. Stringent oversight and transparent practices are essential to mitigate the risks associated with genetic engineering. Striking a balance between harnessing the potential benefits and minimizing the potential risks should be a priority.
In conclusion, the perspectives on genetic engineering are polarized, with some foreseeing substantial improvements and others expressing concerns about potential threats to life on Earth. My stance aligns with a cautious optimism, advocating for responsible and ethical practices to ensure that genetic engineering contributes positively to human well-being without compromising the delicate balance of our environment.
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