IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 3056 – Band 5.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

It is a commonly –held belief that in the current era, learning handwriting by children is an unnecessary aspect of education. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this opinion and my reasons will be stated in this essay.

To begin with, one of the most salient reasons for importance of handwriting is that it is a basic tool for many subjects. This is demonstrated in taking notes, doing exams, and writing homework which are virtually impossible for many schools to accommodate computers for all of these purposes.

Moreover, writing by hand is an indispensable link to learn reading and grammar. Without having the skill of handwriting children are struggling to read effectively and understand the exact meaning of not only academic tasks but also general reading in a daily basis.

Finally, there is a link between cognition and writing by hand. This can be exemplified by many studies which show that students who were forced to write by hand were more successful in learning and in their academic achievements later in life.

In conclusion, as mentioned above, due to the vital role of handwriting in academic purposes, understanding of grammar and reading, and the importance of it in enhancing the cognition in children, I believe that handwriting is an unequivocally important part of education even in this advanced technology climate. Thus, it is critical for school children to be taught how to perfectly learn this skill at school.

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

May 20, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.5 sample

Disclaimer

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
7.0 addresses all parts of the task
7.0 presents a clear position throughout the response
5.0 presents some main ideas but these are limited and not sufficiently developed; there may be irrelevant detail
5.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
7.0 there is clear progression throughout
6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
6.0
Lexical Resource
6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
8.0 produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
6.0 they do not impede communication
6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
6.0
5.5

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Thank you indeed for writing this essay.
Task Achievement (TR):
Addresses all parts of the task: The essay does address the question and provides a clear position on the importance of teaching handwriting to children.
Presents a clear position throughout the response: The candidate consistently supports the view that handwriting is essential.
Extends and supports main ideas: Relevant examples and reasons are provided, but the essay's failure to meet the word count means it is insufficiently developed.

Coherence and Cohesion (CC):
Logically organizes information and ideas: The essay is well-structured with clear paragraphs.
Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately: Linking words and phrases are used effectively, though there are occasional slips.
Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph: Each paragraph focuses on a distinct point supporting the main argument, but the lack of length affects the overall cohesion.

Lexical Resource (LR):
Uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision: The vocabulary is appropriate and varied.
Uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation: The essay uses some less common words and phrases correctly.
May produce occasional errors in word choice and spelling: There are minor errors in word choice (e.g., "commonly-held belief" should be "commonly held belief").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA):
Uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms: The essay contains a variety of sentence structures.
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they rarely reduce communication: There are several grammatical mistakes, such as incorrect articles ("importance of handwriting" should be "the importance of handwriting"), incorrect prepositions ("in a daily basis" should be "on a daily basis"), and minor punctuation issues.

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It is a commonly held belief that in the current era, learning handwriting by children is an unnecessary aspect of education. From my perspective, I completely disagree with this opinion, and my reasons will be stated in this essay.
To begin with, one of the most salient reasons for the importance of handwriting is that it is a basic tool for many subjects. This is demonstrated in taking notes, doing exams, and writing homework, which are virtually impossible for many schools to accommodate computers for all these purposes. For instance, during exams, students need to write by hand, and being proficient in handwriting can help them complete their papers more efficiently and legibly.
Moreover, writing by hand is an indispensable link to learning reading and grammar. Without having the skill of handwriting, children struggle to read effectively and understand the exact meaning of not only academic tasks but also general reading on a daily basis. For example, when children write words and sentences, they reinforce their understanding of spelling, sentence structure, and grammar, which are critical components of literacy.
Finally, there is a link between cognition and writing by hand. This can be exemplified by many studies which show that students who were forced to write by hand were more successful in learning and in their academic achievements later in life. Research indicates that the act of writing by hand engages more areas of the brain than typing, thereby enhancing cognitive development and memory retention. For example, students who take handwritten notes tend to remember information better and perform well in exams compared to those who type their notes.
In conclusion, as mentioned above, due to the vital role of handwriting in academic purposes, understanding of grammar and reading, and the importance of it in enhancing cognition in children, I believe that handwriting is an unequivocally important part of education even in this advanced technological climate. Thus, it is critical for school children to be taught how to perfect this skill at school. By doing so, we ensure that they develop comprehensive literacy and cognitive skills that will benefit them throughout their lives.
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