IELTS Writing Task 2 essay sample 2832 – Band 7.5

IELTS Writing Task 2 - Essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Write about the following topic:

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Candidate’s Response:

In today’s fast paced world, competition is observed in almost everywhere and the consumer market seems to be no exception. While some people claim that high sales figures of companies express the tempting and misleading role of advertisement, under no circumstances would I accept so and assert that advertising is an inseparable part of the contemporary marketing and also helps the consumers to make best decisions.

On one hand, some people hold the opinion that advertising agencies try to convince people to buy products which do not reflect their authentic needs; instead, they encourage people to be on trend regarding every aspect of market from fashion to electronic devices. These companies use various methods by which people are exposed to the latest trends constantly. TV commercials for example, are among the most effective and influential advertising procedures used by advertising agencies for consumers’ constant exposure. As a result, people’s tendency to buy the newest products rises subconsciously without any real need.

Touching on the role of advertisement on consumers’ behavior, I do not see eye to eye with the proponents- i.e. those claiming the negative repercussions of advertising on individuals- for one compelling justification: being informative. Beyond doubt, advertising procedure was first established with the aim of informing the consumers about the contrasting choices they have. In other words, this introduces all the available options which can be selected by people. Following advertisements means that people are more aware of the products being purchased, their qualifications and characteristics. So, advertisements are not only informative but also helpful and applicable.

In conclusion, although some may believe that publicity may raise sales figures subjectively, I find it highly appropriate in terms of applicability.

281 words
Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

April 17, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 7.5 sample

Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Some of the points made here are not necessarily errors but rather better alternatives for absolutely high scores. All we can say after reading this essay is Bravo!


Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Response
9.0 fully addresses all parts of the task
9.0 presents a fully developed position in answer to the question
8.0 with relevant, extended, and supported ideas
8.0
Coherence and Cohesion
9.0 sequences information and ideas logically
9.0 uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention
9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately
9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
7.0
Lexical Resource
9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary
8.0 skillfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation
7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
9.0 the communication is completely natural
7.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
9.0 uses a wide range of structures
8.0 the majority of sentences are error-free
8.0 makes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies
9.0 communication is completely natural
8.0
7.5

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Thank you indeed for writing this essay. Some of the points made here are not necessarily errors but rather better alternatives for absolutely high scores. All we can say after reading this essay is Bravo!

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

The surge in sales of popular consumer goods in contemporary society often appears to be more a result of the persuasive influence of advertising rather than a response to genuine societal needs. While advertising undoubtedly plays a significant role in shaping consumer behavior, the extent to which it dictates purchases over actual necessity is a subject of debate.
On one hand, proponents argue that advertising holds immense power in shaping consumer preferences and driving sales. Through sophisticated marketing techniques, companies create artificial needs and desires, compelling individuals to purchase products they may not truly need. This can lead to a culture of overconsumption and waste, where consumerism is driven more by the allure of advertisements rather than genuine necessity.
On the other hand, some may contend that advertising simply informs consumers about the availability of products and does not necessarily manipulate their purchasing decisions. They argue that individuals have the autonomy to make informed choices based on their own needs and preferences, regardless of advertising influence.
In my opinion, while advertising undeniably exerts a strong influence on consumer behavior, it is not the sole determinant of purchasing decisions. While advertising may create awareness and desire for products, consumers ultimately assess their own needs and make choices based on various factors such as utility, affordability, and personal values.
In conclusion, while the power of advertising cannot be underestimated in driving consumer sales, it is important to recognize that genuine societal needs still play a significant role in shaping consumption patterns. A balanced approach that considers both advertising influence and real societal needs is essential in understanding contemporary consumer behavior.
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