IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3407 – Band 8.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

say how long you now want to rent the apartment for

explain why your plans have changed

tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ......................................................... ,

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Mrs. Templeton,

I hope this message finds you well. I am writing to inform you that I would like to extend my lease on the apartment for an additional six months until February next year. Originally, my plan was to stay for only six months, as I had anticipated moving to a different city for work. However, due to some unforeseen changes in my professional situation, I have decided to remain in this area for a longer period.

My current job, which was initially a temporary assignment, has now been extended for another year, offering me a more stable and long-term position within the company. Additionally, I have grown quite fond of the neighborhood and the convenience it offers, including the proximity to my workplace, various grocery stores, and the peaceful parks nearby, making it an ideal place for me to stay while I continue working here.

While I am generally very satisfied with the apartment, I would like to bring to your attention a minor issue that I have encountered. There seems to be a persistent problem with the plumbing in the bathroom. The water pressure in the shower is quite low, and it has been challenging to maintain a consistent flow. I would greatly appreciate it if you could arrange for someone to inspect and fix this issue.

Thank you for considering my request to extend the lease. I look forward to hearing from you soon and hope we can come to an agreement that works for both of us.

Best regards,

255 words

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 18, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 8.0 sample

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IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

9.0 fully satisfies all the requirements of the task

8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately

9.0 details are fully and clearly extended.

9.0 presents a clear purpose

8.0

Coherence and Cohesion

9.0 sequences information and ideas logically

8.0 manages all aspects of cohesion well

9.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

9.0 skillfully manages paragraphing

8.0

Lexical Resource

9.0 uses a wide range of vocabulary

9.0 with very natural and sophisticated control of lexical features

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 the communication is completely natural

9.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

9.0 with full flexibility and accuracy

9.0 rare minor errors occur only as ‘slips’

9.0 communication is completely natural

7.0

8.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this letter. This letter is strong across all criteria, with well-developed content, clear structure, and precise language usage. The minor issue mentioned is appropriately integrated into the overall purpose of the letter, and the tone is perfectly suited for a formal request to extend a lease. To achieve a Band 9.0, a response must be exemplary in every aspect, with virtually no room for improvement.

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Another Above 7.0 Sample

Dear Mrs. Templeton,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to formally request an extension of my lease for an additional six months, thereby continuing my tenancy until February of the upcoming year. Initially, I planned to relocate after the original six-month period due to a potential job transfer. However, unforeseen changes in my professional circumstances have led me to reconsider.

The temporary assignment I undertook at my current company has now been extended for another year, providing me with a stable, long-term position. Additionally, I have developed a strong attachment to the neighborhood. The convenience of being close to my workplace, alongside the variety of grocery stores and the serenity of the two nearby parks, has made this area an ideal place for me to reside during this time.

While I am generally very pleased with the apartment, I would like to bring to your attention a minor yet persistent issue with the plumbing. Specifically, the water pressure in the shower has been consistently low, which has made it difficult to maintain a steady flow. I would be grateful if you could arrange for a professional to inspect and address this problem at your earliest convenience.

I sincerely appreciate your consideration of my request, and I am eager to discuss the terms of this lease extension further. I look forward to your favorable response and hope we can swiftly reach an agreement that benefits both parties.

Best regards,

242 words