IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3392 – Band 5.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The parents of your Australian friend Chris have Invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her.

Write a letter to Chris's parents. In your letter

say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party

explain why you won't be able to attend the party

give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ......................................................... ,

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

~~Dear Mr. Heinz,~~

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins,

Hope this letter finds you well. Firstly, I would like to ~~apprecaite~~ appreciate your invitaion to Chris’s birthday party. That means a lot to me and I am really grateful for that. As you may know, ~~me and Chris~~ Chris and I have been close friends for a while, and it is great to see your realization of that.

I believe that such a surprise plan will make him feel intrigued, since as far as I am concerned, he never had birthday party before. So, it will be interesting to see his immediate reaction to your surprise plan. I am keen to know more about the scenario that you planned earlier for this event.

Although I ~~woud~~ would really love to participate in the party, I ~~am regretfu~~l regret to let you know that I cannot be present there. As you may be aware of my situation as a temporary immigrant here in Australia, I am studying hard to do another IELTS exam to get the adequate score for my immigration purposes. ~~Tehrefore~~ Therefore, I have scheduled an IELTS exam which coincides with the party, and I am afraid I forgot his birthday, when I was choosing the IELTS exam date.

I know he is going to be upset about it, and for this reason, I ~~would make a promise that I will~~ promise to do my best to compensate for the ~~occured~~ inconvenience. I am planning to gather all of our mutual friends and ~~me inviting~~ invite him to a Mc Coffee place ~~near by~~ nearby, and surprise him with a big cake.

Thanks again for your kind consideration and hope everything goes well as planned. I ~~will~~ look forward to meeting you in a the near future.

Best regards,

281 words

Planning Stage

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

August 26, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 5.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

5.0 generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places

5.0 the tone may be variable and sometimes inappropriate

6.0 presents and adequately highlights bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate

5.0 may present a purpose for the letter that is unclear at times

5.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

5.0 makes inadequate, inaccurate, or over-use of cohesive devices

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically

5.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

5.0 errors can cause some difficulty for the reader

5.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this letter. The incorrect salutation demonstrates a lack of adherence to task requirements, which affects Task Achievement and Coherence and Cohesion. The letter is organized and addresses the task but is marred by frequent errors in grammar and spelling.
To improve, the candidate should focus on reducing errors in grammar and spelling, ensuring correct adherence to task requirements, enhancing vocabulary usage, and providing more detailed and developed ideas in their response.

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Dear Mr. and Mrs. Collins,

I hope this letter finds you well. Firstly, I would like to express my sincere appreciation for your kind invitation to Chris's surprise birthday party. It means a lot to me, and I am truly grateful for your thoughtfulness. As you know, Chris and I have been close friends for quite some time, and it's wonderful to see how much you value our friendship.

I am confident that Chris will thoroughly enjoy the surprise party. To my knowledge, he has never had a birthday party before, so this will be a completely new and exciting experience for him. His immediate reaction to the surprise will surely be priceless, and I am eager to hear all about it. Your effort to plan such a special event is commendable, and I am certain it will be a memorable day for Chris.

Unfortunately, I regret to inform you that I will not be able to attend the party. As you may be aware, I am currently in Australia on a temporary visa, and I am diligently preparing for my upcoming IELTS exam to secure the necessary scores for my permanent residency application. Coincidentally, the exam is scheduled for the same day as Chris's party, and I realized the clash only after I had already registered for the test.

I understand that Chris might be disappointed by my absence, and I sincerely apologize for any inconvenience this may cause. To make it up to him, I am planning to organize a small gathering with our mutual friends at a nearby café. We will surprise him with a big cake and celebrate his birthday together at a later date. I believe this will help show Chris how much he means to us, even if I cannot be there on his special day.

Thank you once again for your kind invitation and for planning such a wonderful surprise for Chris. I hope the party goes exceptionally well, and I look forward to catching up with you all in the near future.

Best regards,

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