IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3390 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport.

Write an email to your friend. In your email

recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn

explain how your friend could learn this sport

suggest that you both learn this sport

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ......................................................... ,

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Ali,

Hope you are doing great. It’s great to see you’ve moved in to my town. We can catch up and do lots of funs ~~toghether~~ together. I’m writing to let you know about the type of sport you’ve asked ~~from~~ me to learn in my town. I’d be more than happy to help you through your decision–making process. What it comes to my mind is learning ~~the~~ soccer would be a good choice.

I’d recommend soccer as the best option ~~sicne~~ since there are enough facilities around for that. Because our soccer team has a good reputation ~~nation-wise~~ nationwide, so the focus of the city’s authorities ~~are~~ is on soccer in my town. The stadiums are ~~accecible~~ accessible by public transport throughout the week. Actually, there is a Hansy club that you can join in which belongs to a local school and is the closest to your place.

If ~~that’d be~~ that is your choice ~~to go~~, you need‘d to complete the registeration registration form online. They have 12 months of training that costs you a 20 bucks. Once you signed up, you’ll have access to the school library as well, free of charge. In the soccer club, they will teach you the basic skills required for soccer, like how to pass to your teammates and so on. Although they teach you a lot of stuff, ~~but~~ their trainings with their world-renowned instructors ~~are~~ is limited to the fundamentals of soccer.

I was actually planning to join the club and would be awesome if you ~~can~~ could ~~company~~ accompany me. It’d be more fun if we do did it together. What could be better than this? , huh?! FYI, I am thinking of the first of July would be ideal for me. Please let me know your ~~availabilities~~ availability so that we can plan it.

Let me know how things go and get back to me as soon as you can.

Best,

Milad

305 words

Presented By: Kasra Sharifan

September 3, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0 arranges information and ideas coherently

6.0 there is a clear overall progression

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

5.0 attempts complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

5.0

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you for writing this letter. There are multiple instances of incorrect word choices and awkward phrasing ("do lots of funs together", "the type of sport you’ve asked from me"). Some repetitions and lack of precision in vocabulary usage. The candidate uses a variety of sentence structures and attempts complex sentences.
There are frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, subject-verb agreement issues, and punctuation mistakes. Errors in spelling and article usage are also notable ("funs toghether", "sicne", "accecible", "registeration").

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Dear Ali,

Hope you are doing great. It’s wonderful to see you’ve moved to my town. We can catch up and have lots of fun together. I’m writing to suggest a sport you could learn here. I’d be more than happy to help you with your decision. I think soccer would be an excellent choice.

I recommend soccer because there are plenty of facilities around for it. Our soccer team has a great reputation nationwide, so the city’s authorities focus a lot on this sport. The stadiums are accessible by public transport throughout the week. There's a local club, Hansy, that you can join. It's close to your place and belongs to a local school.

If you decide to join, you need to complete the registration form online. They offer 12 months of training for just 20 bucks. Once you sign up, you’ll also have free access to the school library. The soccer club will teach you the basic skills required for soccer, like passing to your teammates. Though their world-renowned instructors mainly focus on the fundamentals, you’ll learn a lot.

I was planning to join the club too, and it would be awesome if you could accompany me. It’d be more fun if we do it together. How about starting on the first of July? Please let me know your availability so we can plan it.

Let me know how things go and get back to me as soon as you can.

Best,

220 words