IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3292 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say:

why he/she would not enjoy going to college

explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her

suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Education, Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples, Writing topics

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Simon.

I am writing to you regarding your question whether you should go to college or it would be better to find a job. As I know you very well as my intimate friend, I would say that because you had lack of financial resource to support yourself during education at high school .If you go for getting a job, it will be a better option .The cost of education at college would be higher than it was at school. For that reason, you would have to work round the clock in order to save money to spend on the cost of college later. As a result, you would suffer from this pressure, which will apply to you.

Regarding the reason why I emphasize on finding a job, I would say that you could save money. This saving would relieve your mind and stress of facing financial problems in the future. It would lead you to having a great of time for studying later at college.

A part from this, you might have concerns about finding a decent job.so I could assure you that it would be easy for you to find it. You could work as a translator at hotel receptionist because you can speak three languages .Turkish and French as well as Persian would be perfect. In addition to this, you could teach at different institutes as a senior teacher. As you have experienced this job as a part-time job.it was lucrative and now it would be great to attain as a full-time job.

I am waiting to hear from your decision.

All the best,

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

February 12, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. There are many attempts to write complex sentences, but some of them are either unfinished or inaccurately punctuated. The vocabulary range is sufficiently varied but needs more accuracy. To improve this letter, we can focus more on providing details; for instance, saving money for the future, which is unclear how near or far the future is, can be more illustrative by saying: (just a suggestion)
"As you are planning to get married sometime this fall, saving money would help you plan more wisely and well in advance."

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Hey,

I hope this message finds you in great spirits! Your recent letter about the college versus job dilemma really got me thinking about what might suit you best. You know, the college route might not perfectly align with your current aspirations and preferences. The structured environment and theoretical learning might not be your cup of tea at this point in life.

However, pursuing a job could open up a world of opportunities for you! Imagine engaging in hands-on experiences, utilizing your problem-solving abilities, and leveraging those fantastic interpersonal skills of yours. Roles in customer service or sales could be an excellent fit, allowing you to interact with different people daily. If technology sparks your interest, consider starting with an entry-level position in IT support where you can explore and learn on the job.

The idea of facing new challenges daily, meeting diverse individuals, and simultaneously gaining valuable experience while earning a wage might resonate more with your current aspirations.

Anyhow, regardless of the path you choose, remember I’m here to support you every step of the way. Let’s catch up soon and delve deeper into this conversation.

Take care

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