IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3283 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article

explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Culture and Traditions, Task 1 Letter, Travel and Tourism, Writing samples, Writing topics

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear sir or madam,

I have read an article about my city, which is not correct and I would like to highlight these false information and correct them.

Firstly, you have mentioned that my city has three parks, which are small, and do not have any equipment for children, that are wrong because the government recently has built four parks with modern facilities for children. Moreover , you have published that my city do not have any university ,while city where I live has 2 prestigious university related to engineering and medical whose names are respectively LL university and DD university .

Regarding to why it is significant for your magazine to give reliable information, I would say that as your magazine is very recognized throughout the world, thus you could influence many people in a negative way that would be disappointing. Especially for those who are going to select this district for life.

In relation to what your magazine could do, I would recommend you to print another article in the next article in which you could correct your false information, and you could compensate your fail by apologizing from fellow citizen in this area.

I will appreciate you if you consider these changes in the next printed magazine.

Faithfully,

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

January 6, 2024

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

6.0 addresses the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms

6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. It is a good practice that we devote one paragraph to each bullet point; however, the paragraph should not assume the reader knows, or has read, the bullet point. The three paragraphs here seem like we are answering bullet points and not writing a letter with full information inside each paragraph.
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Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well. I recently came across an article in your esteemed magazine, titled "[Article Title]," which provided information about my hometown, [Town Name]. While I appreciate your magazine's efforts to promote global travel experiences, I must bring to your attention that there are inaccuracies in the information presented.

Firstly, the article incorrectly states that our town hosts an annual hot air balloon festival. In fact, the event was discontinued several years ago due to logistical and safety concerns. Additionally, the article suggests that the local cuisine primarily consists of seafood, when, in fact, our region is renowned for its diverse culinary offerings, including a wide variety of meats and vegetarian dishes.

Accurate information in your magazine is of utmost importance as it influences travelers' decisions and experiences. Misleading details can lead to disappointment and frustration for tourists who rely on your publication for guidance. Therefore, it is crucial that your magazine maintains its credibility by ensuring the correctness of the content.

I kindly suggest that you publish a correction in your next issue, addressing these inaccuracies and providing your readers with the correct information about [Town Name]. This will not only rectify the situation but also demonstrate your commitment to responsible journalism.

Thank you for your attention to this matter, and I look forward to seeing the necessary corrections in your future publications.

Sincerely,

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