IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3280 – Band 6.5

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter
  • Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday
  • Describe some possible disadvantages
  • Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
  • Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

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    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Candidate’s Response:

    Dear william ,

    I am writing to you Concerning your question about going on Camping holiday

    Firstly , I would think that you would enjoy going to this camping because you would see your old friends who you have’ not seen for a couple of years , and as this camping is for the first opportunity for relaxation and being with friends .

    Regarding to some drawbacks , i would say that you won’t have any internet Connection , and electronic devices are not allowed to bring to camping . In addition , you will deprive from having place for rest imdividually , and other people are being gathered in one tent , by default , four people are accepted which could be annoying for someone like you . Also , you would have to prepare your meal without Cooker , which is not Convinient .

    In relation to wheather i would like to accompany you in this outing , i would express that it is not possible because i have planned to go abroad this summer , which is a travel to France . Although it would be good to see you and our intimate friends , it won’t be possible to cancel my travel because all costs have been payed in advance during my arrangement .

    I will appreciate you if you allow me to know that whether you will go .

    Regards ,

    237 words
    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    January 31, 2024

    This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Assessor’s Comment

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter appropriately addresses the prompt, providing reasons for why the friend would enjoy a camping holiday and mentioning some potential disadvantages. The response, while effective, could provide a more detailed description of the advantages and disadvantages. For instance, we could mention the place, the duration, the departure and arrival dates, the terrain features, etc of the planned camping. Coherence and Cohesion: The letter is adequately structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The ideas transition reasonably well between paragraphs. Lexical Resource (LR): There is a reasonable range of vocabulary, but some terms and expressions could be more varied (e.g., "Concerning your question"). There are minor lexical inaccuracies and some awkward phrasing (e.g., "a couple of years" might not be suitable for the context between two friends). Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The letter demonstrates a good command of grammar, but there are some errors and awkward sentence structures (e.g., "Deprive from having place for rest imdividually," should be "Deprived of having a place for individual rest," or similar). Sentence structures are varied, but some sentences could be more complex for higher grammatical range. Overall: The letter effectively communicates the advice, but improvements can be made in the description of advantages and disadvantages, lexical accuracy, and grammatical complexity for a more polished and nuanced response. The response fulfills the requirements of the prompt but could benefit from more precise language use.

    Kasra Sharifan

    IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

    Task Achievement (GT)
    8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
    8.0 presents, highlights and illustrates bullet points clearly and appropriately
    7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended
    9.0 presents a clear purpose
    7.0
    Coherence and Cohesion
    7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
    7.0 there is clear progression throughout
    7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
    9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout
    7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
    7.0
    Lexical Resource
    7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
    6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
    6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation
    6.0 they do not impede communication
    6.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    7.0 uses a variety of complex structures
    6.0 complex sentences have the same accuracy as the simple ones do
    6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation
    6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
    6.0
    6.5

    Feedback:

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter appropriately addresses the prompt, providing reasons for why the friend would enjoy a camping holiday and mentioning some potential disadvantages. The response, while effective, could provide a more detailed description of the advantages and disadvantages. For instance, we could mention the place, the duration, the departure and arrival dates, the terrain features, etc of the planned camping. Coherence and Cohesion: The letter is adequately structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The ideas transition reasonably well between paragraphs. Lexical Resource (LR): There is a reasonable range of vocabulary, but some terms and expressions could be more varied (e.g., "Concerning your question"). There are minor lexical inaccuracies and some awkward phrasing (e.g., "a couple of years" might not be suitable for the context between two friends). Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA): The letter demonstrates a good command of grammar, but there are some errors and awkward sentence structures (e.g., "Deprive from having place for rest imdividually," should be "Deprived of having a place for individual rest," or similar). Sentence structures are varied, but some sentences could be more complex for higher grammatical range. Overall: The letter effectively communicates the advice, but improvements can be made in the description of advantages and disadvantages, lexical accuracy, and grammatical complexity for a more polished and nuanced response. The response fulfills the requirements of the prompt but could benefit from more precise language use.

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    Kasra Sharifan

    Kasra Sharifan

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    British Council certified English teacher, IDP-trained IELTS instructor, content writer, editor-in-chief, co-founder, and Chief Financial Officer (CFO) at IELTS Juice Online Academy.

    An Above 7.0 Sample

    Dear Jeff,
    I hope this letter finds you in good spirits. Your idea about a camping holiday this summer is a delightful idea. The idea of immersing yourself in nature's beauty and enjoying the simplicity of outdoor living is truly invigorating. The tranquility and fresh air bring about a unique experience that can be both relaxing and rejuvenating, allowing you to disconnect from the hustle and bustle of daily life.
    While camping has its undeniable charms, it's prudent to be aware of potential challenges like unpredictable weather conditions and the absence of certain comforts. However, going along with these aspects often adds to the adventure, making it a memorable and character-building experience.
    As for camping together this summer, the notion fills me with genuine excitement. our shared enthusiasm for the outdoors would undoubtedly increase the overall enjoyment of our escapade. Let's go on with planning for an unforgettable camping adventure and create lasting memories together
    Looking forward to our upcoming summer adventure!
    Warm Regards,
    164 words

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