IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3248 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday

Describe some possible disadvantages

Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Sports and Leisure, Task 1 Letter, Travel and Tourism, Writing samples

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The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear alex,

I am writing regarding your intention about going on a camping holiday which is done this summer on September,2020.

I am very glad to hear that you are thinking to come this camping, as this experience would be the first for you, it would be delighted and enjoyable. I have constantly heard that you wanted to go for it, but the weather was not good and calm, in that time you said that the climate air was rainy. So, this summer, the majority of time is favarobale and suny, then you will enjoy it, and a camping holiday under sunlight would be unforgettable.

Regarding the negative aspects of this camping, i would like to remind you that the facilities in that area is not satisfactory. As I know you are vey well that, you are very sensitive about toilets. Those are not very clean and convenient. You would have to travel a lot to get there, and the image of those facilities would upset you. Moreover, you could not carry your mobile phone because the communication won’t cover that area where you are going to camp.

In addition, about my decision regarding coming with you, i could not accompany you this summer. As i went there last year, and i have decided to go abroad, Italy would be my destination.

Again, i am so happy to hear that you would like to experience this camping and i will hope that i could help you to properly take your decision.

Best regards,

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Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

December 28, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. This letter is a good example of an informal letter. The main issue lies in sentence transition. It is important to make sure messages are complete for each sentence part before moving on to another.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. This letter is a good example of an informal letter. The main issue lies in sentence transition. It is important to make sure messages are complete for each sentence part before moving on to another.

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The 6.0 sample upgraded to 7.0+

Hey,

I was excited to hear that you're considering a camping adventure this summer. It's a wonderful idea, and I believe you'd truly enjoy it.

Camping provides a unique opportunity to connect with nature in a way that's hard to replicate. You'll be surrounded by the beauty of the outdoors, from lush forests to serene lakes. The simplicity of life under the open sky is incredibly refreshing. Campfires, roasting marshmallows, stargazing, and the soothing sounds of nature create lasting memories.

However, it's essential to be aware of potential downsides. Camping may involve discomforts like sleeping on the ground, dealing with unpredictable weather, and contending with insects. Proper planning and packing are crucial.

As for camping together, I'd be thrilled to join you. It could be a fantastic bonding experience, and we can support each other through any challenges.

Let's talk more about this soon and plan an unforgettable summer adventure. I'm eagerly looking forward to it.

Take care

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