IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3235 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend in your letter say:
  • why he/she would not enjoy going to college
  • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
  • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her.
  • Write at least 150 words.

    You do NOT need to write any addresses.

    Begin your letter as follows:

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Candidate’s Response:

    Dear Alex

    I am writing concerning your question related to going to college or have an effort for getting a job. As i know you are under pressure as a result of having financial problems, which have been created by supporting your family. i mean that, sending your sister, Alis to university which is very famous for having high costs. You know very well i have finished my study in that university, to be exact, studying at GT university in italy caused me to be under pressure for a long time. So, if you go to college, you could not support your family and your siblings as well as you could not concentrate on your course which would lead you to fail.

    Anyway, you could get a job to finance yourself and be on the safe side for a while

    You could save money and get a loan in order to cover your necessities which cause you to be convenient and improve your conditions.

    There are a wide range of jobs that would be useful for you, as your internet is computer,and you have worked practically at vocational school, thus, you have learned to repair hardware devices which would make a great sum of money if you work on this field. Also, network would be convenient for you if you focus on assembling hardware equipment which won’t have need a licenced person.

    I am looking forward to hearing from your decision immediately.

    Kindly

    Amir

    244 words
    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

    December 8, 2023

    This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

    Disclaimer

    The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

    Assessor’s Comment

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter. There are not many errors because many sentences and structures are grammatically correct, but are not common, or even used at all, in English. For instance, “… cause you to be convenient …” can simply be replaced by “… make you comfortable …”. The best practice is to read similar letters, read more texts, and follow their samples.

    Kasra Sharifan

    IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

    Task Achievement (GT)
    7.0 covers the requirements of the task
    7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate
    6.0 presents and adequately highlights bullet points but details may be irrelevant, inappropriate, or inaccurate
    6.0 presents a purpose that is generally clear
    6.0
    Coherence and Cohesion
    7.0 logically organizes information and ideas
    6.0 there is a clear overall progression
    6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
    6.0 may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
    6.0 uses paragraphing, but not always logically
    6.0
    Lexical Resource
    6.0 uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
    6.0 attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
    7.0 may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
    6.0 they do not impede communication
    6.0
    Grammatical Range and Accuracy
    6.0 uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms
    7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences
    7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
    6.0 errors rarely reduce communication
    6.0
    6.0

    Feedback:

    Thank you indeed for writing this letter. There are not many errors because many sentences and structures are grammatically correct, but are not common, or even used at all, in English. For instance, “… cause you to be convenient …” can simply be replaced by “… make you comfortable …”. The best practice is to read similar letters, read more texts, and follow their samples.

    The IELTS Assessor

    Kasra Sharifan

    Kasra Sharifan

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    British Council certified English teacher, IDP-trained IELTS instructor, content writer, editor-in-chief, co-founder, and Chief Financial Officer (CFO) at IELTS Juice Online Academy.

    An Above 7.0 Sample

    Hey Alex
    I hope you're doing great! I got your letter about whether you should go to college or jump into the job market, and I've got some thoughts on this. First of all, I think you might not enjoy college because it can be super expensive, and you'll have to sit through classes that might not be directly related to your interests. Plus, those long study nights and mountains of assignments can be a real drag.
    Now, why I think getting a job is a good idea for you. It's a fantastic opportunity to gain practical experience and start earning money. You can learn valuable skills and even discover your true passions on the job. Plus, it's a chance to become more independent and make your own choices.
    As for suitable jobs, I know you're great with people, so maybe something in sales or customer service would suit you well. Or perhaps an entry-level position in a field you're interested in. It's all about exploring and finding what fits best.
    Hope this helps, and let's catch up soon!
    All the best
    181 words

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