IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3234 – Band 6.5

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article

explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Society and Community, Task 1 Letter, Travel and Tourism, Writing samples, Writing topics

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Disclaimer

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Candidate’s Response:

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my concerns regarding the article posted on your magazine. Although I became so excited to see the name of my city (Mashhad) in your magazine, highlighting some misleading information, such as geographical location and history of my city made me frustrated.

This should be noted my religious city is located on North East of Iran with a wide range of rich history. It was the capital of Iran many years ago for a powerful king named Nader who governed Iran and strived to expand his territory. My city has a holy shrine which its beauty captivates many international and national travelers from different cities of Iran or other countries every year.

As many Muslim people have a tendency to travel to Mashhad and expand their knowledge of my city’s historical components, it is very crucial to include correct information.

It is strongly recommended to have an official meeting with some Iranian history teachers to your office or even virtually, because they are engaged to dig in Iran’s history. Therefore, you will gain a deeper understanding of my country and specifically my city and you could include the transcribed of your meeting on your magazine. Needless to say, I can assist you to provide a meeting with some history professors.

I am vigorously looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Maryam

231 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

December 10, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.5 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

IELTS Writing Band Descriptors:

Task Achievement (GT)

7.0 covers the requirements of the task

7.0 with the tone consistent and appropriate

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

7.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

6.0 uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

6.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

7.0 has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

9.0 communication is completely natural

7.0

6.5

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. It would be better to mention the erroneous parts and then propose replacements. Using words like “such as” implies that there are more errors, so even after reading this letter, the editor cannot be 100% sure that the article is error-free.

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Dear Sir/Madam

I hope this letter finds you well. I recently read an article in your esteemed magazine about my town, which, while insightful, contains some incorrect information that I believe needs correction.

The article mentions that our town's annual festival is held in August, but this is not accurate. In fact, our town celebrates this event in July. Such details are crucial for visitors and tourists who rely on your magazine for accurate information when planning their trips. Providing incorrect information can lead to confusion and inconvenience for travelers, and it can adversely affect the reputation of our town as a tourist destination.

I kindly request that you rectify this inaccuracy in your magazine's next issue or through an online correction. It's imperative that your magazine maintains its reputation for providing reliable and up-to-date information, as this ensures the satisfaction and safety of travelers.

In the future, I suggest implementing a fact-checking process to avoid such errors. Additionally, you might consider publishing a section for readers to report inaccuracies, which could facilitate ongoing accuracy and accountability.

Thank you for your attention to this matter, and I trust that your commitment to accuracy will be upheld in the future.

Regards

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