IELTS Writing Task 1 letter sample 3229 – Band 6.0

General Training IELTS Writing Task 1 - Letter

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year.

Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job

Say what else you could do for the family

Give your reasons for wanting the job

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Education, Family and Relationships, Task 1 Letter, Work and Employment, Writing samples

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Candidate’s Response:

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Johnson,

I am writing to respond to your advertisement posted on the internet. I want to express my interests regarding teaching Farsi to your children.

I am a private tutor in Toronto, and I have been teaching Farsi for 3 years to the various children with different age groups. I have been awarded several times and nominated for the most expert Farsi tutor in my local area last year. I am wondering that I can be a good fit to teach your children.

As I heard, you have a family business in Sydney, and obviously you should be snowed under with paperwork. A couple of years ago, I had been an office administrator in one of the highest profile companies located on the heart of Toronto. Therefore, I can assist you with organizing the meetings, sending mails and answering your emails while your children are at school.

Honestly, I need this job to gain more experiences, broaden my horizons, and set my earnings aside as I am planning to travel to the Europe to visit my friends.

I am vigorously looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Kind regards,

Mary

193 words

Presented By: Shahab Hosseinzadeh

November 20, 2023

This is an IELTS writing band 6.0 sample

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Disclaimer

The writing sample displayed here is the work of IELTS candidates and has been assessed by our team for guidance and practice purposes. These scores are not official IELTS scores.

Assessor’s Comment

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter could use more accurate words which can match the context in tone.

Kasra Sharifan

IELTS Writing Band Descriptor:

Task Achievement (GT)

8.0 covers all requirements of the task sufficiently

6.0 there may be inconsistencies in tone

7.0 clearly presents and highlights bullet points but could be more fully extended

9.0 presents a clear purpose

6.0

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0 logically organizes information and ideas

7.0 there is clear progression throughout

7.0 uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use

9.0 uses referencing clearly and appropriately throughout

7.0 presents a clear central topic within each paragraph

7.0

Lexical Resource

7.0 uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision

7.0 uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation

6.0 makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation

6.0 they do not impede communication

6.0

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0 uses a variety of complex structures

7.0 produces frequent error-free sentences

6.0 makes some errors in grammar and punctuation

6.0 errors rarely reduce communication

6.0

Feedback:

Thank you indeed for writing this letter. The letter could use more accurate words which can match the context in tone.

The IELTS Assessor

Kasra Sharifan

Co-founder and CFO

British Council certified English teacher, IDP-trained IELTS instructor, content writer, editor-in-chief, co-founder, and Chief Financial Officer (CFO) at IELTS Juice Online Academy.

A very good sample

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing in response to your advertisement seeking a language tutor for your children in Australia. I am excited about the opportunity to apply for this position and believe I would be a suitable candidate.

I hold a strong educational background and have extensive experience in language instruction. I am passionate about sharing my language and culture with others and have a track record of effectively teaching language skills to learners of various ages. Moreover, my patience, adaptability, and interpersonal skills make me well-suited for working with children.

Beyond language instruction, I am also proficient in fostering cultural understanding. I can introduce your children to the nuances of my language in the context of its culture, enhancing their comprehension and appreciation of it.

I am enthusiastic about this role because it aligns with my personal and professional interests. It offers the chance to make a meaningful impact on your children's lives while immersing myself in a new cultural experience in Australia.

I look forward to the opportunity to discuss this further and explore how I can contribute to your family's language education needs. Thank you for considering my application.

Regards

191 words

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